It was so great that you also spent time to explore mental degradation (evolution) of those CyClone users!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!

I loved that the setup was not the typical 'the dad was part of the plan' idea, but more subtle and well-intended - even if it turns out absolutely not what the kid wanted to begin with. I appreciate the variety of transformations. I wondered what would happen if there would be some kids at school who'd actually liked how the skaters turned into preps and thought it's a new trend. They might jump into the same fad without knowing the background. Just as half of the school has turned willingly (fake) preppy cause it's 'cool' now - the diner sees its chance to secretely convert some or all of them into real preppys. It would blur the lines between real and fake preps and make it (almost) impossible for outsiders to stop it... ;) This might be totally not what you had in mind. But perhaps it does inspire you. Oh and thanks for the great haircut scene :D

OMG this story is spectacular but this takes it to another level....Neil's re-appearance and muscle slut dialogue alone made me feel like I just chugged a CyClone! I'm looking forward to see how the story lines of Brody's brother and the father/son team develop.

Excellent work

Nice story, narration is a bit rushed and needs some proof reading and polishing off! Those weird old man hairstyles are not my favourite, but the rest hits some buttons, hehe. I'd be happy to give proofreading a go if you want, chat me up in the Discord chat!

Agreed, this is interesting, but waaay to long to digest. I'd have split it in several parts and release it slowly.

This was amazing, I can't believe it's the first thing you wrote! Can't wait to see what you have in store!

I was waiting for the "mental" effects to kick in and was not disappointed in the least.

@Hypnothrill & @longtimefan - Sorry to disappoint. I don't see it as him bullying his son. He's just doing what he thinks is best for him (as per the age old argument/misunderstanding between parent and child) and as far as he knows, it's what his son wants. After all, Dad found him in the polo and with the Sperrys on his phone. It's not unmotivated. He obviously didn't like the way his son was, so he jumped on his chance to make the boy 'presentable'. As for whether or not Dad knew about the 'quality' of the diner, I don't think it explicitly says that he didn't and can be left to interpretation. ;) Usually my thoughts on preppifying young men it was always hot for it to be forced upon them and didn't involve some sort of drug or whatever. So it had to be a parent or peers doing it to them. In this chapter, then, it's a little of both. As I had said in a previous comment, I wanted the transformations to vary. So I liked the idea that Jim pretty much brought this on himself. Sort of a self-inflicted peer pressure to not lose his only friends, and then... got out of hand (foot?). Also different is that I kept his skater self alive in there. He didn't exactly change willingly, since this is Gay Spiral stories and some sort of mind control is involved. So naturally he had to partake of the diner food to move him over to preppy for sure. But again, as requested/suggested in a different comment, he's stuck inside to watch as he lives his preppy life. There will be at least one one more chapter featuring a focus on these former skate bros, as Jim needs to learn about the 'arrangement' at the diner. And don't worry, there are other uncouth young men out there who need preppified. And our "Three Sperryteers' won't drop out entirely. As for the first boy that Jasper needed to directly inject with the serum, if I can come up with the perfect scenario for it, I'll write it as a side story. Thanks for reading, y'all!

I love this series!...but I have to agree with Hypnothrill on this one. It's explicitly stated that Jim's dad has NOT been to the diner, so all of his actions were of his own free will. Take away the hypnosis/mind control, and you're left with something that feels emotionally and mentally abusive (especially because you do an awesome job at writing Jim as a lost, frightened kid). As Hypnodominion said, it might be a set-up, but in general, seeing Jim forced into his transformation by someone who WASN'T magically/hypnotically influenced feels cruel. I'll keep reading, though--love seeing what comes next!