Recent Comments

Mar 31, 2019
Anonymous
3/31/19, 1:54 PM
damn, i wish this site had a mad libs-like feature where it asks you before you read the story to fill in the blanks, for example: Your name: Room mates name: and then it would auto fill the name in the story
Anonymous
3/31/19, 12:55 PM
Love it, love it, love it! Please, more episodes!
Mar 29, 2019
Anonymous
3/31/19, 12:54 PM
I do like it! Thanx
Anonymous
3/31/19, 12:53 PM
It was so great that you also spent time to explore mental degradation (evolution) of those CyClone users!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!
Anonymous
3/31/19, 12:51 PM
I loved that the setup was not the typical 'the dad was part of the plan' idea, but more subtle and well-intended - even if it turns out absolutely not what the kid wanted to begin with. I appreciate the variety of transformations. I wondered what would happen if there would be some kids at school who'd actually liked how the skaters turned into preps and thought it's a new trend. They might jump into the same fad without knowing the background. Just as half of the school has turned willingly (fake) preppy cause it's 'cool' now - the diner sees its chance to secretely convert some or all of them into real preppys. It would blur the lines between real and fake preps and make it (almost) impossible for outsiders to stop it... ;) This might be totally not what you had in mind. But perhaps it does inspire you. Oh and thanks for the great haircut scene :D
TimNJ
3/31/19, 12:49 PM
OMG this story is spectacular but this takes it to another level....Neil's re-appearance and muscle slut dialogue alone made me feel like I just chugged a CyClone! I'm looking forward to see how the story lines of Brody's brother and the father/son team develop.
Anonymous
3/31/19, 11:56 AM
Excellent work
3/31/19, 11:48 AM
Nice story, narration is a bit rushed and needs some proof reading and polishing off! Those weird old man hairstyles are not my favourite, but the rest hits some buttons, hehe. I'd be happy to give proofreading a go if you want, chat me up in the Discord chat!
Mar 29, 2019
Bulk
3/31/19, 11:40 AM
Agreed, this is interesting, but waaay to long to digest. I'd have split it in several parts and release it slowly.
Anonymous
3/31/19, 11:33 AM
This was amazing, I can't believe it's the first thing you wrote! Can't wait to see what you have in store!