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While I love the idea of the total CORRUPTION of a formally 'good-guy' character, perhaps [in the future], a Cop who the school sends out to investigate the weird going's-on at Dalton's, might become a total Cruel THUG .. However, I feel changing Darry in this way would go against the continuing character development of the 'new' Darry...He should be made to embrace the idea of his job's 'servitude', becoming a caricature of a uneducated Black Man in speech & behavior : at some point feeling more comfortable preforming his duties on his hands & knees. [I could envision a scene where he goes into the cafe to receive his free lunch & when the food is placed on the table, he suddenly feels more comfortable placing his bowl on the ground & eating it while on his knees..while all-the-while, the Skinheads snicker, laugh & call him 'BOY']...The interesting part of this is that he finds nothing unusual in this behavior, remembering back to his poor sharecropper family often sitting on the floor in their shack while eating...Also he should now realize that he was NEVER a student, but was actually a college janitor before he got this new & better job....Also in keeping with the 'golden-shower' motif's in your writing, perhaps at some point Josh or Vince might take a piss on Darry's newly cleaned floor and instead of mopping it up, Darry might feel compelled to LICK-IT-UP. Also when he cleans the latrine's, he might start to feel the urge to lick the toilet-seats clean with his tongue [???] just a thought. The Skinheads might start leaving Darry special puddles of piss on his newly cleaned floors, [& he might find himself looking forward to these generous 'gift's'].....This would not be too un-P.C. , if it's made clear that these changes are a result of Daltons changes in Darius previous memories.....Hope all these rambling ideas are not a distraction for you, as I realize you'll still write the story YOU want to tell....Thank's , Tim

yet another great chapter. i really like that Josh and Vince is treating darry as a piece of dirt, the contempt that us Skin have to those who are lower than us

make Darry in a corruptor for black guys make them more thugish, love it to when a wannabe good guy turns and becomes the biggest evil genius.

I'd enjoy Darry becoming Dalton's right hand guy. It's even more against his nature than servitude. :-)

Wow...couldn't wait for this new chapter..I'm glad your 'taking your time' in developing Darius TRANSFORMATION !!! Slow & steady !! Here's hoping you decide to give Darry some 'new' memories to go with his more 'Docile' & 'Servile' developing nature...Also instead of just a tiny 'hint', how about showing Josh & Vince's developing Skinhead racism [???], for example calling Darry,.. 'BOY', etc.///Perhaps Darry could also slowly start having feeling's of Inferiority???.... Also, I wish you'd consider backtracking a little and showing how Dalton developed the boy's desire to become Cocksuckers & 'piss lovers', etc...Would also love to see Darry become a total Boot Lover & Boot Licker >???......Thanks for taking these humble suggestions under consideration.....Tim

Rozza!! THANKS A LOT!!! I had thought it would end with part 2 and was surprised to see the third chapter : )

Ditto, on the last comment. Incredible imagination.

Really hot! Loved it!!!

amazing story loved it all the way to the end