It was well written and hot until the enslavement and degradation of Darius. I think you handled his salvation well but to leave his boyhood friends racist seems like a disservice. They could have been saved as well but remain full blown piggies. especially since one was gay already you could have made him a preferred boyfriend to Darrius. It's the first story of yours I was disturbed by

Now THAT was a plot twist! I was wondering where you were going with this, and I love where it went. Thank you for your great writing!

please please please next chapter please!!

happy punishment!!

Your first story without a photo!! I like this story but it looked quite similar with Jockland High (the color of uniform or Jock Juice)

Hunter should bring his close friends to the team, bruh!1

THE BEST CHAPTER YET !!!...WOW !!! Your on the same wave length as me...Love, love the negro dialect ! [and also love that Josh is now behaving like a proper racist]...Hope we can look forward to more of this, but it's time Derry acted more like the masochist that Dr. Dalton would probably transform him into ! Once he gets a taste of boot licking, he shouldn't be able to get enough...& just wait till he gets his first taste of a white skinhead's PISS, it should be the most wonderful thing he's ever tasted..However in his mind is he even worthy of a white man's cum [???], he should be ashamed of his own and try to hide it by cumming in his uniform whenever possible, even when he's alone in bed thinking of 'servicing' the superior white men !.....CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER !!!!!

hot

While I love the idea of the total CORRUPTION of a formally 'good-guy' character, perhaps [in the future], a Cop who the school sends out to investigate the weird going's-on at Dalton's, might become a total Cruel THUG .. However, I feel changing Darry in this way would go against the continuing character development of the 'new' Darry...He should be made to embrace the idea of his job's 'servitude', becoming a caricature of a uneducated Black Man in speech & behavior : at some point feeling more comfortable preforming his duties on his hands & knees. [I could envision a scene where he goes into the cafe to receive his free lunch & when the food is placed on the table, he suddenly feels more comfortable placing his bowl on the ground & eating it while on his knees..while all-the-while, the Skinheads snicker, laugh & call him 'BOY']...The interesting part of this is that he finds nothing unusual in this behavior, remembering back to his poor sharecropper family often sitting on the floor in their shack while eating...Also he should now realize that he was NEVER a student, but was actually a college janitor before he got this new & better job....Also in keeping with the 'golden-shower' motif's in your writing, perhaps at some point Josh or Vince might take a piss on Darry's newly cleaned floor and instead of mopping it up, Darry might feel compelled to LICK-IT-UP. Also when he cleans the latrine's, he might start to feel the urge to lick the toilet-seats clean with his tongue [???] just a thought. The Skinheads might start leaving Darry special puddles of piss on his newly cleaned floors, [& he might find himself looking forward to these generous 'gift's'].....This would not be too un-P.C. , if it's made clear that these changes are a result of Daltons changes in Darius previous memories.....Hope all these rambling ideas are not a distraction for you, as I realize you'll still write the story YOU want to tell....Thank's , Tim

yet another great chapter. i really like that Josh and Vince is treating darry as a piece of dirt, the contempt that us Skin have to those who are lower than us