Recent Comments

Anonymous
2/14/19, 7:19 PM
love it.
Anonymous
2/14/19, 7:12 PM
You should pay more attention to your verbs. You forget to inflect them and you seem to switch between tenses randomly. For example, "He knows this was the ultimate revenge, take him right here and he couldn’t do anything about it. He suppose Luke will be really angry right now, but when he look at his face, Matt see he was crying like a baby." could go like "He knew this was the ultimate revenge, taking him right there with him unable to do anything about it. He supposed Luke would be furious, but when he looked at his face, Matt saw he was crying like a baby." Head to the forums: there are many people happy to proofread promising stories.
ForgottenCradle
2/14/19, 3:29 PM
yeeees,this was even better than before more please more please
2/14/19, 1:53 PM
Thank you, Vicbiguy! I had as much fun researching this story as I did writing it -- it was one of the first times an erotic story required ANY research, I suspect, perhaps in the history of erotic stories -- but I can't imagine adding anymore to it. Don't get me wrong, I would love to revisit the world, but certainly Pekka's story is complete. Personally, I think this story's uniqueness should allow it to stand alone, as fun as it is to imagine....
Anonymous
2/14/19, 1:27 PM
thanks I love it
Martin
2/14/19, 11:50 AM
By the way, I've reduced the word limit for chapters of community series to 400!
Kyle
2/14/19, 11:19 AM
Really cool idea. Loved the ending, would like to see more now that they are orc breeders.
Anonymous
2/14/19, 5:18 AM
You have a gift for building erotic tension.
2/14/19, 4:50 AM
That was a nice mind controlled, all sex interlude in a great story. Loved the ending.
2/14/19, 4:45 AM
Well done. Hot. A bit more resistance perhaps, but even still, Bravo!