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KinkDawg
2/3/19, 9:06 PM
I tried to push my wallet and keys into my new form fitting pants but there was no room. In trying, though, I felt a piece pf paper in the front pocket. I pulled it out and read it. "If you're reading this you're probably planning to come looking for me. You won't find me but I highly recommend a bar whose address is listed below. You'll find it more to your new liking. I'm not unfair so I'll give you the warning you never gave your stealthed bottom's: If you can make it a week without getting bred you'll revert back to who you were before. If you return to stealthing, the changes will come again and become permanent. If someone cums inside you without a condom, the changes will become permanent immediately. I really do wish you good luck. Either way, I wish you a good time". I finished reading the message and shoved the paper back in my pocket. Somehow I knew he would communicate with me through that paper. I looked in the mirror admiring the body of someone I would fuck hard. But this time I felt a need deep inside my ass. I needed to be fucked. The more I thought about getting fucked the wetter I felt my ass becoming. I shoved my I.D. and some money into my back pocket and clipped my keys to my belt hoop and headed out. I knew the bar: it was a leather and Levi bar in the South side. I wasn't feeling good about this.
Anonymous
2/3/19, 8:26 PM
This endlessly long story had potential but it is too repetitious, predictable and mean-spirited. I am actually rooting for Cassie.
Anonymous
2/3/19, 8:23 PM
I actually love the set up. It give more background, and it sets things up for a better payoff. Hopefully the brothers will get together.
Feb 3, 2019
Anonymous
2/3/19, 8:13 PM
SO HOT! Cant wait for the next part
Anonymous
2/3/19, 8:12 PM
wow.... absolutely love how you detail domination and humiliation, the sequence removing his ability to read was hot as fuck
2/3/19, 7:38 PM
100% agree with Hypnothrill. Other than the plot, the most important thing regarding a story are the characters. A good backstory provides character development. It allows the reader to know who the characters are, which in turn, allows the them to become invested in that character. Throughout the story, we should see a "character arc". Meaning, the character at the beginning of the story should not be the character at the end of the story. They should undergo some kind of mental, physical or behavioral transformation / realization. And the only way a reader is able to get this information is from (what Bboy) called "boring .. setup". I would also say, if a story isn't to the reader's liking, stop reading and find another. If you want straight up sex, go watch a porno. But there is nothing to criticize when it comes to character or plot development. Don't get me wrong, I have criticized stories. But when I do it, it's usually for grammatical or continuity errors. Or maybe when what the author is describing doesn't make a whole lot of sense. But in this case, Hypnothrill is obviously creating a slow build-up to the eventual climax. Think of it as a roller coaster slowly ascending the climb before you experience the thrilling drop-off.
Anonymous
2/3/19, 7:37 PM
I always ‘hate’ the first part of your stories because they feel like they’re teasing us. So much intrigue, so much build up, but that pay off always out of reach until the later chapters go up... That being said, I absolutely LOVE what you’re setting up in this one and I can’t wait to see where things go from here! I just hope we don’t have too long to wait, because it’s already excruciating. Lol
2/3/19, 6:48 PM
Excellent story. I love the lonely jock taking pity on the bullied nerd and jocking him up. A little sad that he didn't keep his smarts, but I absolutely love that you gave him a smooth hairless jock body!
Mdlftr
2/3/19, 5:42 PM
I agree with "Longtimefan" that you really have a talent for stories about a character's journey of self-discovery. Instead of mind control, it's, more like mind enlightenment! Great series from a terrific writer. I loved the humor!
Anonymous
2/3/19, 5:31 PM
So hooot... I love when younger dominates older with humiliation