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muscledrain
2/3/19, 2:14 AM
Fantastic story so far. I love everything about his transformation, both mentally and physically. I hope Timmy gets some muscle on him!
Anonymous
2/3/19, 2:10 AM
I really liked this story! I would have loved if it the ages were reversed tough. Still a great story!
muscledrain
2/3/19, 1:46 AM
I can't wait to see him really change into one of the builders! Great story, man.
May 13, 2012
Anonymous
2/3/19, 1:12 AM
You know, I wonder what happens if a person beats level 200? Does he become the controller? Gain a few slaves? Or something else?
Mdlftr
2/3/19, 1:02 AM
Very clever! I loved the humor, such as Noah was slumped on the bench, seemingly as tired as if he had actually exerted himself. He had convinced the gym teacher at the beginning of the semester that he shouldn't be showering after class because he would just get sweated up on his way home and have to take another shower there. Therefore, by skipping the shower at school, he was economizing water and doing his part to save the planet. or This afternoon, though, he and Tyler were seated on the floor opposite one another, staring at the strange bottles they'd been given. Noah dared to open the cap just enough to smell its foul stench. "I'm telling you, they're shitting us. Literally," Noah insisted. "All the jocks probably got together and shit in a blender and now they're laughing their asses off at the idea that they convinced us to drink it. Those yellow bits are probably undigested corn." "And I'm telling you, I think the coach is giving the players special food to make them bigger and stronger." "Yeah, but it's probably steroids or HGH or something else that'll turn your balls into BBs."
Anonymous
2/3/19, 12:45 AM
I love it when authors combine smoking and hypnotism! This story is AWESOME.
Anonymous
2/3/19, 12:24 AM
This needs more than a little editing. No quotation marks, bad paragraphing and use (or lack) of capitals in particular. Also get your timing right. If the first guy in the club was fucked for two hours before a l slow milking, how could this be done to 7 in the same night/shift? The manager was not suspicious? I know this is fantasy but details are important.
Anonymous
2/3/19, 12:18 AM
Is this a prequel/sequel to Hair Spread? Because this is awesome! I definitely want to read more.
corinthian
2/2/19, 9:56 PM
Great stuff - thanks!! Hope there is more to come.
rik
2/2/19, 9:25 PM
Loving it- keep writing!