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Jan 30, 2019
Anonymous
2/2/19, 6:58 PM
Really liked the brainwashing aspects of this story as he automatically believes in his new reality!
2/2/19, 6:21 PM
I apologize for asking, but I was curious regarding one scene of the story. You used the word "consume". That Brett "consumed" the the men of the club. Did he actually eat them, in the sense that he became a cannibal? It was really hard for me to wrap my mind around that detail. In my head, I couldn't help but wonder if would be better to use the word absorb. If you've seen such movies as "The Thing", I can imagine tissue being absorbed. I just had a harder time accepting a Hannibal Lecter scenario. I just wondered if this was a grammatical mistake or maybe this is what the alien actually does to humans.
Anonymous
2/2/19, 4:11 PM
another hot chapter... thanks for sharing... look forward to reading many more of your works...
Corinthian
2/2/19, 4:07 PM
Very nice build up - thanks!
alienmaster1@yahoo.com
2/2/19, 3:01 PM
i will try to fix it up on part 2 i wear all rubber gear it inspires me
Mutabear
2/2/19, 3:00 PM
It is an interesting story idea, and I enjoyed the content of the story, but it was a little hard to read due to some grammatical errors and some places where sentence structure was confusing.
2/2/19, 2:59 PM
Thanks Orc-Br - the continuity issue is now fixed. Amazing how often errors creep in no matter how many times you look at something to check.
Anonymous
2/2/19, 1:37 PM
Is comment of luxus having beautiful eyes a hint that the villians have been brainwashed too?
Anonymous
2/2/19, 1:16 PM
Hot!!
2/2/19, 1:13 PM
I think the premise of this story is good, but you could really use an editor, to help clean up your many spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as to give you some feedback on pacing your stories and developing your ideas.