Recent Comments

LongtimeFan
1/26/19, 12:48 PM
That was INCREDIBLE! What an ending! Tragic, revolting, and heartbreaking...Bruce's inner monologue after his second transformation was pure poetry. The line "Nothing had changed...just the filters" was beautiful, and the horrible nihilism as he approached the depths of his issues--"Because happiness would require change, and work, and admitting that something inside himself didn't want to be happy..."--was both terrifying and achingly familiar. Only you could take the idea of "Man turns into pig" and turn it into a stark look at gay dating, power dynamics, and the anxieties that, I think, plague many men in our community. Well done, sir. Well done.
1/26/19, 10:58 AM
The choice was purposeful, but less about economic status, and more to keep him relatively young.
1/26/19, 10:56 AM
Since you're in the process of editing, I'll just bring up a small point that probably only matters to me: Did you mean for Jaxson to be an Adjunct Professor? Adjuncts are not full-time faculty, and they're hired on a course-by-course basis (and thus are paid less than Assistant, Associate, or Full Professors). Some adjuncts can't even afford housing or health insurance, and so for a moment I thought you were trying to make a pointed comment on Jaxson's low economic status.
1/26/19, 10:35 AM
I am removing the change in speech patterns at the end though, I sense it will make a lot of you uncomfortable and adds nothing to my personal enjoyment of this kink.
1/26/19, 10:28 AM
I went back and forth on the dialect, and on writing this story at all to be honest. As a black man who finds this kind of thing arousing I find myself in a weird space to occupy.
1/26/19, 10:26 AM
I'm a white guy, and so I don't want to get all self-righteous about racial representations that make me uncomfortable. But for me, this story's allusions to the history of African-American slavery (and the transformation of Jaxson's speech into stereotypical slave dialect), cross a line into white supremacist territory.
1/26/19, 9:45 AM
Remaining her's, should now be fixed. There are some parts I feel could do with being re-written, but I figure it's not my story, so I've just done the bare minimum to fix the obvious problems. If anybody else wants to re-write the necessary bits, feel free to do so. Just make sure you give credit to the original author.
KL
1/26/19, 9:22 AM
Will you still plan to write the "jocks disappearing one by one" story? That sounds very interesting!!
Anonymous
1/26/19, 9:18 AM
Wow! Seems like you had read my mind. My first love broke my heart and I have always thought of doing exactly what Jack did
Anonymous
1/26/19, 7:58 AM
What you need now,is to introduce a drug called ROAR,that makes a cock bigger,users more TOP.Bet it would be popular amongst the criminals.?