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Anonymous
1/26/19, 4:53 PM
The sex part of the story is hot. Had the professor been the imposing 'white dude', then I would have had more problem with the color issues. The professor in that instance would have been in a 'master' position by virtue of the control he exercises as teacher. But with the student in control, I'm not sure it matters. It's such a fine line that requires tact in storytelling.
Anonymous
1/26/19, 4:50 PM
Seconding LongtimeFan. Your work has broadened my perspective over the years in many ways -- yeah it's pretty twisted, but hey, there are other sites for "not twisted." Great writing, nice story, thanks for continuing to share with us.
Anonymous
1/26/19, 4:46 PM
A few less questions and parrot responses would be nice, example- "where are you going?" "where am i going?" "yeah where are you going?" "i dont know where im going."
Cubwriter30
1/26/19, 4:37 PM
Wow! this was great! Love the original idea, hope theres more to come!
LongtimeFan
1/26/19, 12:48 PM
That was INCREDIBLE! What an ending! Tragic, revolting, and heartbreaking...Bruce's inner monologue after his second transformation was pure poetry. The line "Nothing had changed...just the filters" was beautiful, and the horrible nihilism as he approached the depths of his issues--"Because happiness would require change, and work, and admitting that something inside himself didn't want to be happy..."--was both terrifying and achingly familiar. Only you could take the idea of "Man turns into pig" and turn it into a stark look at gay dating, power dynamics, and the anxieties that, I think, plague many men in our community. Well done, sir. Well done.
1/26/19, 10:58 AM
The choice was purposeful, but less about economic status, and more to keep him relatively young.
1/26/19, 10:56 AM
Since you're in the process of editing, I'll just bring up a small point that probably only matters to me: Did you mean for Jaxson to be an Adjunct Professor? Adjuncts are not full-time faculty, and they're hired on a course-by-course basis (and thus are paid less than Assistant, Associate, or Full Professors). Some adjuncts can't even afford housing or health insurance, and so for a moment I thought you were trying to make a pointed comment on Jaxson's low economic status.
1/26/19, 10:35 AM
I am removing the change in speech patterns at the end though, I sense it will make a lot of you uncomfortable and adds nothing to my personal enjoyment of this kink.
1/26/19, 10:28 AM
I went back and forth on the dialect, and on writing this story at all to be honest. As a black man who finds this kind of thing arousing I find myself in a weird space to occupy.
1/26/19, 10:26 AM
I'm a white guy, and so I don't want to get all self-righteous about racial representations that make me uncomfortable. But for me, this story's allusions to the history of African-American slavery (and the transformation of Jaxson's speech into stereotypical slave dialect), cross a line into white supremacist territory.