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ForgottenCradle
12/30/18, 10:30 AM
hmmm...I actually thought he got the doctor one his side a bit too early,but I am thrilled to see why the whole plan play out now. as always a magnificent chapter I love it
Dec 29, 2018
Anonymous
12/30/18, 10:02 AM
Excellent work
12/30/18, 8:47 AM
Yeah, this really is a terrific start. I hope you continue this story!
12/30/18, 8:29 AM
Please DON'T write a chapter from Peter's perspective. One major reason this series works so well--aside from your gifts with language and characterization--is that we get everything from the perspective of the unwitting victims, rather than Peter. And as written, Peter's such a super-genius that it would be boring to hear all about his diabolical plans in advance; there'd be almost no dramatic tension.
nycboot
12/30/18, 7:31 AM
Even if English is not your first language, you have an usual talent in expressing yourself. The sequences with Pat are absolutely surrealistic! You write as if there is no time, there is just existence, waiting for the next stimulant. Pat increasingly is disconnected from his memories and exists only in the present and only to serve. Many stories have such an idea, but you convey it with such a strong mood. It's really wonderful. I hope you continue the story!!
Chuy
12/30/18, 6:24 AM
hot as hell man. each spin off is so good
Anonymous
12/30/18, 5:21 AM
Yeah, it's working!! Loved it.
wang@yopmail.com
12/30/18, 4:50 AM
like always, the best!
Jacinto
12/30/18, 2:29 AM
damn I love this one too. you great at this man!
12/30/18, 2:13 AM
I actually find it very difficult to write from the hypnotist's perspective, which is odd when you consider that I fantasize about myself *being* the 'tist most of the time. I've tried it before, and it just doesn't come out right most of the time. Prom Night is the only exception to that so far. Besides, it's like pulling back the curtain and seeing that the wizard isn't really all that impressive. :) That said, I'm not ruling it out entirely. There's a lot of things to go through over the next couple of chapters. I'm thinking that doing it from Timmy's POV is probably the best choice, but Peter's POV might be workable too...or maybe split it into two? I think I'd run out of material doing that, though. We'll see.