Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/17/18, 10:35 PM
Why is the military man the dumb one? I was more upset with that than with the poor writing, which is the moral equivalent of milenials texting one another. I'll not read another one of your stories.
tomozco
12/17/18, 10:35 PM
Very interesting story! It started slowly and gradually in the first part, and now it starts to reveal where it's heading in this second part, with the action intensifying quickly. Looking forward to the next part and see how it all unravels out!
Anonymous
12/17/18, 10:31 PM
Sign me up.
Anonymous
12/17/18, 10:30 PM
Interesting twist!
Dec 17, 2018
12/17/18, 10:21 PM
I do like that Jacob had just enough mind left to shove more cake pops in Corey than he got in himself himself
12/17/18, 10:17 PM
All the good stuff happened way too fast. You should do more in the protagonist's head.
Anonymous
12/17/18, 10:14 PM
I love how hot this series is. Don't stop man!
12/17/18, 10:03 PM
Hey thanks for commenting, yeah looking back I get where you're coming from. I feel my Transformations can get a bit short or seem rushed (and across stories they feel very similar). I never really got round to improving or adding to it due to most people on tumblr not commenting and just liking so I only went with that as an indication that everything was fine. Knowing what I need to change or improve on will be good for writing new stuff. I have one more story thats getting uploaded soon that maybe in a similar state. I will look at trying to change or improve my current work with other stuff from here. If you could send me any recommendations that would be great. I will come back to this one and older ones and try and improve on them in the future. Thanks :)
Anonymous
12/17/18, 9:33 PM
The idea is good and the writing is OK but overall these stories seem lazy. They start off decently, albeit with uninteresting characters, but the ends seem like you were bored of writing it. The changes happen quickly and we're just told what happens not actually shown it. The only actual change is someone saying "bro" a ridiculous amount of times. It's an erotic story so it's not like I'm expecting an intricately woven novella, but so many stories and authors on here have written fantastic short stories that you can read many times and still get off to while these you can barely get hard before it's over. I wouldn't normally take the time to comment but these types have stories have been posted a lot the last few days and it's frustrating getting excited by the tags and summary only to get to the end and think, "Wow that was lame." if they're coming from Tumblr or something, maybe take the time to revisit some of them and add some detail to give them more substance.
Dec 17, 2018
Anonymous
12/17/18, 9:25 PM
Excellent work