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12/17/18, 10:17 PM
All the good stuff happened way too fast. You should do more in the protagonist's head.
Anonymous
12/17/18, 10:14 PM
I love how hot this series is. Don't stop man!
12/17/18, 10:03 PM
Hey thanks for commenting, yeah looking back I get where you're coming from. I feel my Transformations can get a bit short or seem rushed (and across stories they feel very similar). I never really got round to improving or adding to it due to most people on tumblr not commenting and just liking so I only went with that as an indication that everything was fine. Knowing what I need to change or improve on will be good for writing new stuff. I have one more story thats getting uploaded soon that maybe in a similar state. I will look at trying to change or improve my current work with other stuff from here. If you could send me any recommendations that would be great. I will come back to this one and older ones and try and improve on them in the future. Thanks :)
Anonymous
12/17/18, 9:33 PM
The idea is good and the writing is OK but overall these stories seem lazy. They start off decently, albeit with uninteresting characters, but the ends seem like you were bored of writing it. The changes happen quickly and we're just told what happens not actually shown it. The only actual change is someone saying "bro" a ridiculous amount of times. It's an erotic story so it's not like I'm expecting an intricately woven novella, but so many stories and authors on here have written fantastic short stories that you can read many times and still get off to while these you can barely get hard before it's over. I wouldn't normally take the time to comment but these types have stories have been posted a lot the last few days and it's frustrating getting excited by the tags and summary only to get to the end and think, "Wow that was lame." if they're coming from Tumblr or something, maybe take the time to revisit some of them and add some detail to give them more substance.
Dec 17, 2018
Anonymous
12/17/18, 9:25 PM
Excellent work
Stroppy author
12/17/18, 9:25 PM
I'm intrigued. What do you sggest. I can still edit or add an alternate ending
Dec 17, 2018
Anonymous
12/17/18, 8:59 PM
I thought I recognised your name! happy to see you survive the tumblr implosion. You wrote a time loop story for me once. Good times. Stick around!
Bibimbap
12/17/18, 7:49 PM
This story keeps going better and better! WOW! Good job with the 3 bears, I like that. Twister seems to have very powerful powers, I wonder what plans do you have for him. But I still want to know, what happened with Elastic Stretch? I'd love to know how his life became altered and twisted. Would be cool if the edits that are made collaterally are not exactly perfect (that's it, because Jean didn't edited Stretch's persona directly), and the transformed hero is half aware of the changes, but is unable to put any resistance. At this point you have many good characters and transformed heroes and villains. I'd love if you make a chapter showing us how interact with the new universe (you know, what kind of crimes they commit, or "heroics" act they make), or one with an actions scene to see many of them in action, and a t this point, the action scene would be easily turned into an orgy, ha, ha, ha! keep working, please! the story is really cool!
Dec 17, 2018
12/17/18, 6:45 PM
This is great! I can't wait until Jacob and Corey share their cake pops with some of the straight boys on campus.
Anonymous
12/17/18, 6:12 PM
Love this! Please continue