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10/20/24, 4:41 PM
Oh, so this is *Platunium End* rather than *Death Note*. Neat. Hopefully the ending is better than the manga's.

10/20/24, 6:39 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) I’ve taken elements of different novels and shows hahah. Death Note and Platinum End were my initial inspirations, but Future Diary and the Fate series were also both huge influences in the world building.

10/20/24, 8:48 PM
@[rusticheart](/user/show/135087) Interesting. I quite liked *Future Diary* when I watched it younger, but I never went around to watching *Fate*. Honestly, nothing is ever truly original, mixes of distinct sources like you did is often how you get the more unique retelling.
10/20/24, 8:43 PM
Awww, Finn and Kian's love is strong enough to resist. Also, I thought Zachary was Wrath amongst the siblings at first because his powers induced self-**hatred**, but I just realize he is simply Envy. Should have been obvious to me.
10/20/24, 7:33 PM
Would really love to see this continued..... Please!
A curious reader
10/20/24, 6:32 PM
What happened to this storyyy
Xackery
10/20/24, 5:36 PM
Wow! That was EXTREMELY hot!! I really love Kyle’s transformation into fatherhood, it was kind of sweet reading the ending :-)
10/19/24, 11:40 PM
Great start to what I hope will be a hot multi-part story!

10/20/24, 4:59 PM
@[Demonicus Satani (Solo)](/user/show/588192) Thank you! That's the plan :)
10/19/24, 2:07 PM
Wow. Love this!

10/20/24, 4:59 PM
@[MChicago](/user/show/10024403) Thanks! I've never written stories before, so this is a fun learning experience.
Anonymous
10/20/24, 4:33 PM
When he said that Jake is the love of his life and he felt so heart broken and betrayed, it really resonated with me, and how he knew that the System must incorporate Jake to be his good Beta Drone. I want to become part of the System.
ls1999
10/20/24, 3:41 PM
I can see the professor confronting to coach, only to end up hypnotised by him. I’m loving the story so far though, and I personally am rooting for Lucas to win out!