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Bibimbap
12/12/18, 6:15 PM
Hello again, MasterJerker! Man, thank you very, very much for consider and use my suggestions. I knew that a follow up was going to be great, but this exceeds my wildest expectations. It's insanely hot, and I LOVE IT SO MUCH. The change of Hydration into the raunchy Yellowwater is fantastic. I love the degradation of his heroic figure, how filthy he becomes in mind and body, and how ridiculous he is now as Yellowwater. What a filthy lame excuse of a hero Parshall Hexton is now! (and the 'hero' jailed for being such a pervert in public is something I never imagined , ha, ha!) The dumbing down was a hot touch, I didn't mentioned before, but a superhero becoming dumb as you've made him, is something that turns me on. You wrote it perfectly, and I thank you so much for it. There's something that I like about your writing: you see, I imagine Hydration all pretty face and clean cut, then he's transformed and he's still handsome, but with a dumb expression, disheveled, unkempt and scruffy. But your description of the situation is so good that it doesn't need further descriptions, is easy to assume thing based on what you said and that's something pretty cool in your work, I like that so much. I like that you're putting some restrictions to Editor, how his powers works and the backstory of the characters that you're making, is far more entertaining and interesting to read, and makes me want to know more. By the way, I like your sense of humor. "Marital status: Married to his right hand*" made me laugh a lot. I like the idea of Ray Jenks, people with powers that they don't use and remain as civilians, is a curious concept and a very smart idea. The change on Papa Ray and Elastic Stretch was very hot too, I hope you go deeper on them (or better said, that Papa Ray go deeper into Elastic Stretch's ass, ha, ha!). Keep writing, please, this is going wonderfully!
Anonymous
12/12/18, 4:54 PM
I'd love to see more heroes corrupted into hot muscled pervert like lightningstrike. Jean should add more people to have threeway with lightningstrike or even more.
12/12/18, 4:16 PM
Something else really hot, and more in the direction you seem to be heading, would be if Dave gets the app and makes all of his professors/teachers and teachers assistants into sexy greedy bottoms that will happily give him an A if he lets them suck or ride his cock. Since he’s used to getting whatever he wants, he’d now find doing homework and writing tests to be a hassle. Of course, James would be more than happy to do his homework for him now, but that wouldn’t help with tests. Plus, James isn’t the smartest tool in the shed now
Anonymous
12/12/18, 4:03 PM
This is incredible!! Keep writing!!!
Anonymous
12/12/18, 3:55 PM
really really good! great chances and direction of the story.
Dec 12, 2018
Anonymous
12/12/18, 3:50 PM
I'm going to be the scrooge. This was a great story that has so much potential. I can see future episodes where friends drink 'The Drink' and live their lives at the gym. However --- the writing sucked. Sentences with no caps. Sentences with no punctuation. Phrases masquerading as sentences. I had to read it three times to make sure I didn't misunderstand what was being said. Rozza, keep writing, but please run a spell check, grammar check, anything check before you post. The better writers on this site will tell you: writing must include editing.
12/12/18, 3:38 PM
Definitely another hot chapter. I think a good switcheroo would be figuring out how to get Stan to use the app to make Dave and James into super dominant tops that fuck and a whole bunch of other eager bottoms.
Anonymous
12/12/18, 3:09 PM
awesome
Anonymous
12/12/18, 3:05 PM
so well written and hot... will enjoy reading part 2!!!
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
12/12/18, 3:02 PM
I like bad guy with shades of gray, on the Editor's case, I'm proposing the desire for a family to call his own, not that he would admit it out loud