Recent Comments

11/25/18, 11:05 PM
i guess I'm going to b weary of my emails for a while... well done, wish it was longer
Touche
11/25/18, 11:00 PM
The story and drama are superbly erotically exciting to experience in words the changes that transform Marc into a small hairless peepeed boy with small nuts that do not produce any sperm into a deep and passionate lover for his Master/daddy. I am looking forward to reading about more changes that were hinted at in the story about piercings. Excellent and many thanks for taking the time to create such a great read that stirred by horniness.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 10:33 PM
great work.
11/25/18, 9:12 PM
Wonderful and enticing story. So, where is that parade? I will bring a spare hanky.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 8:35 PM
These chapters are way too short, if I'm being completely honest. I can tell that you are excited to get this story out there. But at the very least, add more to your chapters. The last three chapters could have been easily combined into one chapter. In three chapters, your main character has only eaten supposedly magical beans and jacked off. I hope you can improve going forward. Otherwise, I'll lose interest.
BankStreet
11/25/18, 8:14 PM
Can we hope/assume that Todd is due for a change in perspective?
11/25/18, 6:31 PM
I think I like where this is going but with these extremely short chapters, with very little action, it's rather difficult to know. I just hope I don't lose patience and abandon the story before it gets really good.
11/25/18, 5:25 PM
On the plus side, you're doing a good job of getting us into Jackson's head. However, Jackson's head doesn't seem like a very sexy place to be, since he keeps getting distracted with thoughts of Jello commercials and Heterochromia iridium. I'm still looking forward to reading what happens next; I just hope there's a little more erotic stuff and that we finally get some mind control.
Symonel
11/25/18, 4:49 PM
Firesix, do you mean to tell me that the notion of the Caravan doesn't get you raging hard, as it comes thrusting towards the border? I'm just playing with you dude. Thank you all for the feedback, it is most appreciated. Also if you have any ideas as to the direction of the story, please do not hesitate to share them. I have multiple ideas floating around in my head concerning where I shall take this story, I'm just going with what feels like the natural progression in my mind, but that doesn't mean I'm not receptive to ideas. I may or may not incorporate them, but they are welcomed, nonetheless. Thanks for the feedback guys. I really do hope to make you all hard. ;) And as a side note, I do have a sense of humor, that I sometimes will subtly write, my initial statement that included the phrase "...be gentle, I’m like a flower.", was a bit of hidden humor that was referencing South Park, when Butters made a music video for youtube called "What, what, in the butt". But, no pun intended from the previous statement, I digress, I shall continue with the story and hope you all keep up the suggestions as well as keep reading. Thanks again!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 4:19 PM
Excellent idea and writing. I read every word from beginning to end. I many times don't do that. Constructive comment: wish the mind control would have been carried on longer to a more resistant cowboy. Keep up the good work. Very promising!!!