Recent Comments

joaopomilio@hotmail.com
11/25/18, 12:48 PM
what will happen to Todd?
Anonymous
11/25/18, 11:51 AM
Tell the story at your own pace. If readers can't get into your character's head then they won't appreciate getting into their pants...
Yvne
11/25/18, 9:11 AM
Interesting premise, but the political commentaries kind of erased any intrigue I might have felt. Boredom took over by the time I read the fifth paragraph, and I just couldn't force myself to read any further. Expressing political views is fine, but when it's done in such a blatant, "in-your-face" manner (at the very start of the story, no less), it significantly slows down the momentum of the story. The idea is genuinely interesting, as I am personally a fan of stories involving magical objects/items. The writing style is also an appropriate choice for this particular type of story. I may eventually come back to this and read it again to completion, but for now, no thanks.
11/25/18, 8:48 AM
perfect......more please
Anonymous
11/25/18, 7:16 AM
Very hot!
Sexcrab
11/25/18, 7:14 AM
I have to agree with the second comment. Mark as a submissive slave whore but maintaining his rough, shit-talking personality is awesome and amazing hot. The scene with the two slaves fighting, with arguments, who should be fucked by their master was so good that I don't resist: I had to CUM HARD! Continue this series, please!!! PS: I liked the idea of one of the commentators for the next slave. A cocky handsome CEO executive, elegant, lean but well-muscled is perfect for the advance of plot and for the pleasure of public, XD! Think about it.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 7:10 AM
Stories about religious bigots are a dime a dozen. Just focus on the kinky shit that's coming.
LongtimeFan
11/25/18, 6:52 AM
Brilliant start, and very interesting! I like how you world-build by including current events; it's a great balance of realism and magic (I especially love the passage about bigots who lean on the Bible to support anti-gay marriage while shoveling shrimp and alcohol in their faces). Can't wait to see what's next from you! :)
Anonymous
11/25/18, 5:58 AM
Awesome! I love oblivious muscle men.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 5:27 AM
It is so incredible! I love the way you "dom" (joke) your characters, they are on point and even when they are "stereotypical" in design, they are not in their performance during the narration, which is awesome, also, you captured really well their overall personality and everything has the perfect amount of detail. Congratulations and please continue!