Recent Comments

11/25/18, 6:31 PM
I think I like where this is going but with these extremely short chapters, with very little action, it's rather difficult to know. I just hope I don't lose patience and abandon the story before it gets really good.
11/25/18, 5:25 PM
On the plus side, you're doing a good job of getting us into Jackson's head. However, Jackson's head doesn't seem like a very sexy place to be, since he keeps getting distracted with thoughts of Jello commercials and Heterochromia iridium. I'm still looking forward to reading what happens next; I just hope there's a little more erotic stuff and that we finally get some mind control.
Symonel
11/25/18, 4:49 PM
Firesix, do you mean to tell me that the notion of the Caravan doesn't get you raging hard, as it comes thrusting towards the border? I'm just playing with you dude. Thank you all for the feedback, it is most appreciated. Also if you have any ideas as to the direction of the story, please do not hesitate to share them. I have multiple ideas floating around in my head concerning where I shall take this story, I'm just going with what feels like the natural progression in my mind, but that doesn't mean I'm not receptive to ideas. I may or may not incorporate them, but they are welcomed, nonetheless. Thanks for the feedback guys. I really do hope to make you all hard. ;) And as a side note, I do have a sense of humor, that I sometimes will subtly write, my initial statement that included the phrase "...be gentle, I’m like a flower.", was a bit of hidden humor that was referencing South Park, when Butters made a music video for youtube called "What, what, in the butt". But, no pun intended from the previous statement, I digress, I shall continue with the story and hope you all keep up the suggestions as well as keep reading. Thanks again!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 4:19 PM
Excellent idea and writing. I read every word from beginning to end. I many times don't do that. Constructive comment: wish the mind control would have been carried on longer to a more resistant cowboy. Keep up the good work. Very promising!!!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 2:48 PM
fascinating twist!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:52 PM
where is the mind control?
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:49 PM
while the writing is excellent there is no mind control in this story and there is no reprogramming.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:43 PM
Excellent story...gets better and better
Anal Assassin
11/25/18, 1:17 PM
Another good chapter. Keep up the good writing. I think they are gonna have have public sex in the park or something like that.
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
11/25/18, 12:48 PM
what will happen to Todd?