Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/25/18, 2:48 PM
fascinating twist!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:52 PM
where is the mind control?
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:49 PM
while the writing is excellent there is no mind control in this story and there is no reprogramming.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:43 PM
Excellent story...gets better and better
Anal Assassin
11/25/18, 1:17 PM
Another good chapter. Keep up the good writing. I think they are gonna have have public sex in the park or something like that.
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
11/25/18, 12:48 PM
what will happen to Todd?
Anonymous
11/25/18, 11:51 AM
Tell the story at your own pace. If readers can't get into your character's head then they won't appreciate getting into their pants...
Yvne
11/25/18, 9:11 AM
Interesting premise, but the political commentaries kind of erased any intrigue I might have felt. Boredom took over by the time I read the fifth paragraph, and I just couldn't force myself to read any further. Expressing political views is fine, but when it's done in such a blatant, "in-your-face" manner (at the very start of the story, no less), it significantly slows down the momentum of the story. The idea is genuinely interesting, as I am personally a fan of stories involving magical objects/items. The writing style is also an appropriate choice for this particular type of story. I may eventually come back to this and read it again to completion, but for now, no thanks.
11/25/18, 8:48 AM
perfect......more please
Anonymous
11/25/18, 7:16 AM
Very hot!