Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/24/18, 9:18 AM
Definitely love where this is going. The story seems to be about control and the transformation of an alpha jock into a beta slave. All of the different kinks and fetishes you listed would be hot, but they should be simply the results and techniques that Alex uses to bitch Marcus. Like I would not make any one fetish to central to the story, other than Master/slave and mind control and so on that is necessary for the transformation and end results. I would love to see more domination and humiliation in school and at home by Alex, maybe go more into detail about the hypnosis tapes and how they are affecting Marcus while he sleeps. Also love the outward changes like making Marcus wear his jock. Maybe show how he slowly learns to love showing off his body and wearing slutty sub clothes and underwear. Maybe show that he dyes his hair and waxes all his body hair off to "better" show off his body in his new clothes. Also, if possible, could the next chapter be longer? You post pretty quickly, but I can't wait to see what happens. In any case, love where it is going. Can't wait for more!
Lispy Lips
11/24/18, 9:10 AM
I love your mind and creativity WonderBread. I'd love for you to take me, fuck me, and make me yours.
Anonymous
11/24/18, 7:12 AM
Could you put a code for every color? I got confused which one was which at the end.
Nov 23, 2018
Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
11/24/18, 6:23 AM
Love the age regression! so hot!
Anonymous
11/24/18, 5:59 AM
Love where this is going! Think it would be especially hot if he gave Marcus a foot fetish. Can you imagine him getting turned on whenever he saw one of his friends feet, etc? How humiliating :P
Nov 23, 2018
Anonymous
11/24/18, 4:32 AM
Nice Mamet reference there!
stroppy
11/24/18, 4:09 AM
You're a true artist. I wish I had a fraction of your skill with words and concept
Jan 4, 2007
Stroppy
11/24/18, 3:51 AM
Fantastic
Anonymous
11/24/18, 3:07 AM
i shot a load reading your stories again. so hot!
Nov 22, 2018
Curiosity
11/24/18, 2:43 AM
Hypnothrill and Horologia, that's a fair critique. I didn't put much time or thought into developing Randy's motivation beyond me wanting it to be a transformation story. I'll definitely admit I rushed it for the sake of getting it up sooner. Anon, no I don't have a Patreon and sadly no plans to make one, but that could change. :)