Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/5/18, 3:53 PM
The concept is there, but this felt more like reading a grocery list than an actual story. Slow it down a bit and let the characters react to the changes. It felt like the characters were saying "well, that's done, your turn, repeat"
Anonymous
11/5/18, 12:41 PM
I feel like I've read this story somewhere else before.
Anonymous
11/5/18, 10:05 AM
I also love cursed game stories but the magic of a TF/MC story is in the transition and in the characters. If you don't slow down and use more descriptive terms for the changes happening to the physical forms and the characters mental states whether aware or not, you will fail to grab the readers attention and make them care. Just spend more time crafting your story and it's world. Also, as a related note, it's typically not a good idea to repeat yourself over and over. You've written the words the game says to the participants for every round. The reader already understands after the second time that this will happen every time. So, when you continue to quote it every round you are being redundant and it gets boring to read. I don't mean to be overly critical. I'm just trying to pass along helpful information which will help you better reach your audience and maybe also create better wanking material for yourself. Cheers
Anonymous
11/5/18, 9:08 AM
i need more stories like this! i love how th set dynamics between individuals are changed when a stranger is introduced, especially with the Dom/Top was formally submissive towards the new character.
Anonymous
11/5/18, 3:51 AM
interesting but short
Anonymous
11/4/18, 11:56 PM
I'm glad I'm not the only one who loved this story, I keep coming back to it. Such an incredible sexy transformation. PLEASE CONTINUE
greentreeman151@yahoo.com
11/4/18, 10:31 PM
What a delight to read and experience. The story gives a whole new meaning to a walk in the woods.
11/4/18, 10:16 PM
Would be interesting a second part.
Anonymous
11/4/18, 9:30 PM
Exciting muscle growth - need even more descriptions of the growth, particularly the butt and pecs. What will he find once he reaches the cologne company? What IS ths stuff? Did his partner leave the bottle for him? Lots of potential in this story!
Anonymous
11/4/18, 9:14 PM
Body transformation, mental rearranging and muscle growth - who could ask for anything more?