Recent Comments

Anonymous
10/29/18, 7:54 PM
another easy chapter to read
txwrestler@swbell.net
10/29/18, 3:59 PM
Excellent story and looking forward to the next chapter! Hope your health problems have improved!
Anonymous
10/29/18, 3:12 PM
ha ha ha ha
Anonymous
10/29/18, 2:53 PM
more please
Anonymous
10/29/18, 10:50 AM
I can't wait until you finish this!
Anonymous
10/29/18, 9:11 AM
I loved it. I enjoy when you deviate slightly from the main plot or do stand alone stories in the same universe. At first I thought this would just be another coloured underwear conversion tale like we've seen from you before but i've been proven wrong in allll the right ways :) more please!
Oct 28, 2018
Anonymous
10/29/18, 8:50 AM
Editing wise it's fine but there are chunks of the story where a descriptor wasn't in place, such as: "One syringe had 10cc’s of fluid, the second had almost 20cc’s. Funny, weren’t immunisations given into a muscle group?. Another puff of the atomiser..." There's no mention of the syringe being an atomizer, so when you start talking about the atomiser out of the blue there ends up being a loss of flow. The comment about the muscle groups doesn't even make sense until you piece everything together, but by that point I lost my focus into the story for a bit.
Anonymous
10/29/18, 8:19 AM
Awesome story! I can't wait to see what happens with Jake. You should do more with Carson Carson
Daniel
10/29/18, 7:54 AM
I found this to be a bit 'dry' ( Ironic a story titled SQUISHY that I find dry...no offense, I didn't find it very sexual or excitingly erotic.but keep writing- something 'juicy' will come along and inspire .°9