Agreed, this concept is killer! I'm really excited to see how you continue it!

Another vote for him breaking the curse, because Devon needs someone to take care of him.

Well written. Sizzling. Kept my rapt attention. Keep up the good work.

great chapter thrilled to see if there will be some new guys

This chapter was indeed different than the others, but I will say one thing (well, maybe two, or more) and I hope this is taken as encouraging: Each and every entry so far, has been rich, alive, and engaging to me. While I have been been known to have - let's say - a "semi-autonomous, overactive," imagination, I generally only purposely use it to enhance/rewrite threadbare and simple stories and allow myself to get lost in well-written short or long form stories. I've read my fair share of long form engaging stories that appear to be somewhat incongruous in the beginning; the sense of confusion is palpable. What draws me in is how skillfully *just enough* detail is woven into each piece of what I am reading to take me into the moment and visualize what is occurring. Even for multi-part stories that appear the most disjointed on the surface, those apparently disjointed parts will have at least a few threads of commonality running through them which can carry onto the next to add dimension and context. (Even *disconnected* in the obvious sense can be very much *connected* in a myriad of subtle ways.) Some of the best multi-part stories I've ever read have started out rather disjointed at first glance. As the story progressed, what at first appeared disjointed eventually transformed into merely multiple threads of a whole that came together later. I know this is early to say this, as it's only been three parts so far, but I will say that I'm seeing the same pattern here. So far, each part in and of itself has just enough detail, just enough world-building, to give an overall feel. Several bits and bobs from the previous chapters can be traced through here: the sense of wealth and opulence and the world apart that resides in, a sense of privilege of those wealthy, the theme of mind control in that context, a bit of resistance and fighting on the part of the protagonist. If you go back and look at all the parts so far, you can see all of this to varying degrees weaving through. In addition to that, names have been given, situations have been set. Like Chekhov's gun, you generally don't want to introduce something early on and not address it later. The greatest multi-part stories that started off as disjointed as this did it for a purpose. I am incredibly intrigued, and dearly wish to see what happens next. So please, take this as encouragement, take your time. Plan and write your story out the best you can make it for the vision you want to present. We will all happily come along for the ride.

Love this story. Can't wait to see the next chapter.

Wow. What an awesome, teasing chapter. Nice pacing on this. You stopped at the perfect time for everyone to really hope he makes it. What's funny is that, because of all of the rest of your stories, the real twist would be Eddie making it and breaking the curse :)

[https://web.archive.org/web/20100119155652/http://www.mcstories.com:80/UnlimitedWishes/UnlimitedWishes.html](https://web.archive.org/web/20100119155652/http://www.mcstories.com:80/UnlimitedWishes/UnlimitedWishes.html)

Entering links on the iPhone is difficult. If you click through on the link above, you can scroll to the top of the page and click on the author's name (Good Boy) to get links to the rest of his stories from that time period. (That's a snapshot of MCStories.com from January 19, 2010. Archive.org backs up almost every page on the internet. It's a great resource for stuff like this)

Original and hot!!