Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/6/18, 10:16 PM
if you keep going, and i hope you do, stay in firs person. even if swap out between characters. the 3rd person POV stood out.
9/6/18, 9:37 PM
Hey, thanks! I agree, I could totally improve on writing induction scenes. I usually prefer a faster method, but induction can be super hot too. Thanks for the feedback!
Daniel
9/6/18, 9:07 PM
Waiting to see how this plays out I.J.S.
Anonymous
9/6/18, 2:53 PM
you're getting good at writing the induction part of hypnosis, MST. and the feet kink is hot as always. nice job!
Tai RedPanda
9/6/18, 11:17 AM
Looking forward to next chapter
Anonymous
9/6/18, 6:46 AM
amazing! continue
Daniel
9/6/18, 4:15 AM
getting it a bit clearer,looking forward to the next chapter I.J.S.
Daniel
9/6/18, 4:01 AM
No offense ( and it may be because I'm tired ) I'm having trouble following the narrative as written. Bikers and cops are 2 of my fetishes, so hopefully I'll be able to ' get on board ) I.J.S.
Anonymous
9/6/18, 3:48 AM
As usual, a great beginning to what will be for sure a great series. Love the fluid writing style. Can't wait for next installment.
Anonymous
9/6/18, 2:41 AM
I don't mind the journal but the part the POV shift to Pete was jarring.