Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/12/18, 12:20 AM
The first few parts were hot but this story is getting old and tired.
8/12/18, 12:02 AM
Ps. My translate program translated the word Germa*n to Engliah for what I assume is ridiculous reasons.
8/12/18, 12:01 AM
So I don't speak German but technology is a wonderful thing and makes this quite readable. It's also quite enjoyable. Good job!
8/11/18, 11:25 PM
Google translate does a pretty good job.
Anonymous
8/11/18, 10:38 PM
I still love these stories! Keep them coming!
8/11/18, 10:18 PM
Whenever I read stories like this I find them hot. I also find them confusing. I understand some guys need a lesson in treating others with understanding. It's a fine line between corruption and enlightenment. I hope Ash has an actual chance at redemption or at least he gets the choice to have him and his friends stay as they are or revert to their lives before the game. I mean he would get to chose without the mental controls on him. I kind of assume he would not want to be his former friends' fucktoy but who knows. The atmosphere has darkened in Chapter 5 with Liam showing his sadistic side. I can understand Ash perhaps deserving punishment but do his friends as well? I'm not trying to be judgmental. I write stories sometimes and these are the kind of questions I ask myself.There must be a purpose for such transformations. Perhaps I will understand by the end? Please continue this well written and intriguing story. Write it your way. I'm not trying to influence you just understand the story more fully. I want to write more in future but these ideas of purpose are holding me back. It's a great story.This story and others really have me thinking deeply. Sorry if this comment seems pointless.Feel free to have it deleted if you want to.
Clownboi
8/11/18, 10:06 PM
Hi folks had some serious health things to attend to. Back to normal now so the next chapter should be up shortly
8/11/18, 9:58 PM
i was just plotting out possibilities. I don't think i would do your stories justice by writing an off-shoot since enthrallment isn't a major turn on for me. The concept of mind control for some benevolent use appeals to me.
8/11/18, 9:33 PM
Thanks, man. All good. I'm a long-winded writer and I know it. Dog forbid you ever hook me up with an editor! Thanks for the comment.
Oct 2, 2006
8/11/18, 9:31 PM
Thank you @nycboot! I like the horror elements of this story and the creepy way it finds its climax. Upon re-reading it, I'm surprised at how easily I change POV about a third of the way through the story as we meet our true protagonist. This is one of my most popular stories -- I wish I remembered more of the process....