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Zeph
8/1/18, 8:08 AM
I loved the finale so much. Even tho theit memories were altered they still stayed together
Shitpig
8/1/18, 4:29 AM
Yess! Love stories with farting and scat! Oink oink!
Nov 13, 2008
Daniel
8/1/18, 3:44 AM
Truly a terrific read...it's like SALEM'S LOT meets STAND BY ME...dude - you're good!I.J.S.
M1
8/1/18, 2:23 AM
WOW....another great story!! Looking forward to the next part -
8/1/18, 2:11 AM
For those that have read the original, I've begun to make just minor edits to the source material. So there's just going to be the slightest differences from what I wrote in 2007. So consider this a soft update. Anyways ... more and more of this story is coming back to me. I remember being fascinated by the image of the red light on the forehead. Any time that the light falters ... meaning on the men that aren't fully converted, I remember imagining it as a sputtering engine. It would flicker, dim and then die. Only those that are fully converted have their lights burning brightly and continuous. Once you're converted, there is absolutely no chance of regaining your humanity.
8/1/18, 12:13 AM
Great story. I have to agree to two of the above: 1) I love mind loss, and 2) wish the mental changes were more gradual with some resistance. But as written, still EXCELLENT
Anonymous
7/31/18, 11:45 PM
I agree with R
Daniel
7/31/18, 11:31 PM
D U D E !! This is f*****g hot ! Haven't really even gotten to the 'meat" ( sorry, I had to go there ) of the story, and the elements of first class 'nasty' are there. Loving the details in every area, stoked to move on and experience what you have in store...I.J.S.
Anonymous
7/31/18, 11:05 PM
i loved it but the part when he told Dunn to be ugly... that is waste
R.
7/31/18, 10:40 PM
The story is very good, but I love what you did with both cops. The humiliation is just great! Please, make Dunn keep part of his uniform (or Barnes' dirty ruined uniform, with his cap and badge, once he had quit to his job). It's very hot to destroy and humiliate an authority figure, so please let him keep some of his cop traits. Take your time to describe how he slowly loses his good looks, and how he sees his change. In his now debased and clumsy state, maybe Ed could rename him and call him Officer Dunce or something like that, to remind him that he once was an officer, but now is just a dirty dumb pig.