Recent Comments

Anonymous
6/9/18, 1:38 AM
What a great story incredibly badly written. The language is that of a primary school kid. You need to build up the suspense more. For example, Tyler’s corruption is extremely quick and seamless. As though there is no reactance from him at all. Missed opportunity to show his struggle against an overwhelming horniness etc. Also, the storytelling is too abrupt. One moment the reader is following one plot line, the next, new characters are being added almost like an afterthought (see Nick’s introduction to the story). Great stories are often rewritten to finesse the language and develop a compelling story line/arc. This story has much potential but feels as though much rewriting is needed to make it exciting and enjoyable.
robbot
6/9/18, 1:36 AM
Please continue. I have to know also, how it turns out between Ryder and Chad. OMG. I keeping looking for the next Chapter
Anonymous
6/9/18, 1:25 AM
Great story! Keep it Cumming ;-) Can’t wait to see Emerson’s seduction.
Anonymous
6/9/18, 1:07 AM
Love this so much. Can't wait to see what happens to Jules
LongtimeFan
6/9/18, 12:49 AM
I love this! Great first effort. Stories of muscle growth, inflation, and infestation are some of my favorites. :) A little constructive criticism: the descriptions of the guys read a lot like plain lists, and repeat quite a few times. Try to find other ways to describe their appearance, or mix up how you tell it. Back to what I liked—the scenes of the infestation and growing were top-notch, and each one was different, which is always cool. Wonderful work!
Anonymous
6/9/18, 12:30 AM
Love it!
slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
6/9/18, 12:02 AM
Damn! Great to be made into a slut!
Anonymous
6/8/18, 10:40 PM
bahaha not that it bothered me but Bryce Harper is the name of this dumb-ass baseball player people are talking about all the time. Was that a name drop on purpose?
nyjogger4e@aol.com
6/8/18, 7:45 PM
Great story. Slow, smooth seduction. Love it.
Anonymous
6/8/18, 7:01 PM
Eagerly looking forward to Part 2 and more of the crew turning giddy like Sadiq