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8/25/21, 1:11 PM
really good!!! but I never read anything about the part where Fiver is a big scary hockey dog... the story starts with him already in trance in a good puppy state... so I can't see the difference between the before and after the hypnosis :( I think if you can add some backstory, the story will be even better :3

8/25/21, 4:59 PM
Sorry! This just kind of flopped into my head as is and I wrote it down. I will try to do a prequel. @Math_Reez ๐Ÿ’™

10/5/24, 5:16 AM
@[Alpha Artemis](/user/show/1997819) ๐Ÿ’•
10/5/24, 5:15 AM
Youโ€™re stories make me incredibly hot โ€” thank you, SIR
10/5/24, 3:59 AM
All the deep analysis and I'm here reeling from the horror of having both "Haig" and "Kissinger" in the same story. One was bad enough. ;)

10/5/24, 5:12 AM
@[skwzbxx](/user/show/915353) Clever you for spotting the references ;-) More Easter eggs to comeโ€ฆ
Anonymous
10/5/24, 4:02 AM
"dumbed down by an extended orc gangbang and/or a one time gang bang punctuating a romance" is a really hot concept. please don't leave us hanging on that one.
10/5/24, 2:25 AM
Ali deserves to be taken down.
10/4/24, 9:53 PM
Fun story setup, just a gentle critique; youโ€™ve got a pattern of doubling up on descriptors conveying what a character is thinking/feeling. โ€œ_person_ felt _adjective_ and _adjective_โ€ Consider either sticking with one adjective or mixing it up with how a feeling is manifesting in the characters physically (his throat felt tight, their shoulders sank, her teeth clenched, etc). Itโ€™ll make your writing more dynamic for the reader to enjoy ๐Ÿ˜‰
10/4/24, 9:36 PM
Hot story! That was an interesting beginning, I wonder how the next chapters will develop.
10/4/24, 9:06 PM
god i wish there was a sequel with his brothers
10/4/24, 9:04 PM
Great story. Like the fact that it had some lasting effect on the guy. I am normally not much for ghosts and possessions because it is usually all temporary and not much actual altering of the minds.
Jun 23, 2024
10/4/24, 7:34 PM
Super, super hot controlled POV here. Andre's inner monologue smashing against the reality is exactly what I come to this kink for. Thanks for sharing.