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LongtimeFan
6/3/18, 10:36 PM
BRILLIANT! Every description—from Will’s being taken to the other guys turning into mindless muscleheads—got me going. And I must be too used to your work, Hypnothrill...as soon as I read the description of the cop, I said “OK, he’s already in on it.” :p That doesn’t make it any less great, though!
Cigarboycody
6/3/18, 10:33 PM
Another hot story?! I climaxed to the climax
6/3/18, 9:01 PM
Hey friends, absman420 here! Hard to type these comments with my cock so hard. Damn nice story progression! I've really been enjoying it. That said, I've been so inspired by Tattcub, I'm actually writing a chapter myself! How funny is that? Inspired by my original story, Tattcub wrote this -- and inspired by this, I'm writing another (later) chapter in the saga of Saul Bennett. Look for "Twink Number Twelve" coming soon from yours truly! Thanks Tattcub -- for this and that!
BlindSeer0
6/3/18, 8:48 PM
You did a great job with this story. Muscle growth and dumbing down are my two main kinks, and you wrote them amazingly here. You took someone elses story and made it your own. You should be proud. Saul is a great villain. He's an asshole mastermind that always has a scheme. In the original story he tricks a man and in yours he traps Max and James. But he's still not perfect. The client was able to go to James in the first place, and James surprised him when he spit in his eye. For all his tricks and his alchemist, he's not unbeatable. I know people will disagree, but to me the best villains are able to be defeated. Most (but not all) the best stories have the villain/antagonist defeated at the end. It doesn't mean there isn't loss or consequences, of course. Just that they get whats coming to them. Based on comments you've made, I'm hoping James has a trick up his sleeve and Sal gets whats coming to him (even if James and Mack can never go back to normal.) Anyways, great job. Looking forward to the next chapter. (Also, nice job getting a mention in about the original story with Saul mentioning his other plans across the country)
Anonymous
6/3/18, 8:00 PM
Holy shit
Drew Noble
6/3/18, 7:53 PM
Very well written and great concept. The loss of identity is hot, would be interested to know what else happens to the boy. Is he a house boy? Does he stay in the dungeon? Does master do more than just stroke him ;)
Max
6/3/18, 7:14 PM
That was worth waiting for! Yes, James definitely made a few errors in judgment, but I have a feeling Jimmy will be much more polite and open to Saul's suggestions. ;-) I hope there will be another chapter. I'd love to see more detail on Mack and now Jimmy'a mental transformations as well as their physical ones, and their new relationship to each other. I know they are now massively dumbed down muscle sluts but it's always hot to see some awareness of their transformation, and also would love to see some reactions to the transformation and how James old life is to be dismantled. You do such a great job describing the sense of uncontrolled gay lust that overtakes James. He can resist much of Saul's conditioning but he just can't resist his new insatiable need for cock and muscle.... he hardly even seems to want to resist. The description of his transformation is so seductively hot. Just like the previous chapters, you excel at creating a steamy, dreamlike quality, I really do hope for more. ;-)
andyrew36
6/3/18, 7:05 PM
And to the other person thank you for the complement and the advice :). I made sure to fix the errors. It should be reposted with all the updates soon :)
Anonymous
6/3/18, 6:59 PM
Hot indeed. Now if I could only find that gym in real life!!
andyrew36
6/3/18, 6:54 PM
Thank you Mystranger for informaing of my misuse of the word “My.” I fixed t and should be available when it updates :)