Recent Comments

andyrew36
6/3/18, 7:05 PM
And to the other person thank you for the complement and the advice :). I made sure to fix the errors. It should be reposted with all the updates soon :)
Anonymous
6/3/18, 6:59 PM
Hot indeed. Now if I could only find that gym in real life!!
andyrew36
6/3/18, 6:54 PM
Thank you Mystranger for informaing of my misuse of the word “My.” I fixed t and should be available when it updates :)
Anonymous
6/3/18, 6:54 PM
Super hot! Mostly you call him Lucas or he, and use “his”(third person), but sometimes you call him “me” and use “my” (first person). It’s just kinda disorienting. It’s a little easier to stay in the super sexy flow of the story if you pick one or the other and stick with it :)
Anonymous
6/3/18, 6:39 PM
Awesome series
Andyrew36
6/3/18, 6:09 PM
If you see a specific area where it switches perspective in the story feel free to point it out for me because I don’t see what you are talking about. And I’m glad you all are liking the stories!!!
Andyrew36
6/3/18, 6:05 PM
Thanks! I will double check it twice for grammar next time! I don’t see where you are saying it switching between 1st and 3rd person, besides during the actual conversation.
Anonymous
6/3/18, 5:49 PM
Will the next chapter be coming soon? Cannot wait to find out what happens next!
Anonymous
6/3/18, 5:15 PM
So hot!! I'm still hard.
Anonymous
6/3/18, 4:53 PM
The impact of the hypnosis and the control over Lucas made me so hard that I had to read this great story twice. As for the grammar, ten more seconds of editing and you'll be fine.