I also felt like it was a toss off - maybe just to check our response. I also would like to know how he came to control all these Himbos!

Hi Nathan - thanks for "outing" yourself. I love this story! Like others have mentioned, aspects of this story can be seen in your work (e.g., the set-up reminds me of "When the Fantasy Comes True" and the tree business reminds me of "Brain Feed"). But as you grow you're not writing the same story over again - you're getting much more in tune with what the protagonists are thinking. I find this so hot. Reading a description of a guy fucking a tree is okay, but knowing internally that the guy much fuck the tree as part of his life - that is so much more thrilling and arousing (and I mean REALLY arousing). I wonder if you would ever experiment with minimizing the action and have most of the story be what's going on in the mind of the protagonist. Like in this story, when the needle pierces Nathan's skull (just like when the needles puncture Jake Bennett in "Brain Feed") - you dispatch it in about 2-3 paragraphs. Do you think you could "suspend real time" and describe what's going on in the victim's mind as he undergoes the changes? (I find this super hot.) Lastly, in your comment above, you wished that this would be a community. It is becoming such a community through Martin's wonderful innovation of the Community portion of the website. For example, I've loved reading M. Greene's stories but actually interacting with him makes it all the more exciting and personally fulfilling. You've always been very kind & forthcoming in the private emails we've exchanged, I hope you consider participating in the Community area.

Even though I usually like the character with the ability to be the top, this was still super hot!

Please keep writing. The plot is just too good to stop now.

miss this series, my fave, still come back to read it

Would love to talk to you about doing a jock transformation story

"This type of writing is quick and sloppy." Hey it's another anon who can't even be bothered to at least come up with a handle before berating the author with his complaints. You know, even the most meticulously detailed author needs to take a break sometimes and write a quick vignette or two to avoid a potential impending writer's block. Plus, you never know, it could literally be just a quick snapshot prologue to the real story if the writer chooses to continue. Not *everything* has to be meticulous and detailed. Have you considered asking questions rather than telling? For instance, instead of: "...just my personal opinion that you in the past have been a much better writer, when you actually had to describe your situations and characters in your story better." You could have maybe asked: "Whoa, this is definitely a departure from your normal style of writing. Are you trying something new or just throwing out a quick hook as a prelude to a new series?" Then you could have followed it up with something like: "That transformation was incredibly fast, are you planning on continuing the story describe more of these in detail? Maybe include perspectives from the eyes of the others guys around the pool? I have to admit, this format is really not my cup of tea, but I've always enjoyed your stories in the past and am curious to see if you'll take it further." Stuff like that is constructive criticism. Destructive criticism is stuff like "you didn't do this...you didn't do that...this is terrible...this is sloppy...all you did was..." Unfortunately all that does is tell the author, "You didn't write the story how I wanted you to." If you feel you need to proactively defend yourself by saying "it may look like X, but it's just my personal opinion..." Then you really did intend on doing X whether you like to admit it or not. Outside of grammar/syntax/academic-rules, criticism *IS* your own personal opinion as presented to the author. That much comes across without actually having to bluntly point it out as such. I would urge you in the future, please consider re-framing how you present your criticism of an author's writing to that author. It will be much more fruitful to not only you and the author, but to anyone else who happens to be watching, and possibly considering writing a story of their own.

I also want this story to continue. I think we're all in agreement. WE WILL BECOME.

Truly a classic -- love stories in this vein (see also the Bliss series by z119z)

Super hot story. Love the reality change for Ryan and Cole. Thanks for this...