Would love to talk to you about doing a jock transformation story

"This type of writing is quick and sloppy." Hey it's another anon who can't even be bothered to at least come up with a handle before berating the author with his complaints. You know, even the most meticulously detailed author needs to take a break sometimes and write a quick vignette or two to avoid a potential impending writer's block. Plus, you never know, it could literally be just a quick snapshot prologue to the real story if the writer chooses to continue. Not *everything* has to be meticulous and detailed. Have you considered asking questions rather than telling? For instance, instead of: "...just my personal opinion that you in the past have been a much better writer, when you actually had to describe your situations and characters in your story better." You could have maybe asked: "Whoa, this is definitely a departure from your normal style of writing. Are you trying something new or just throwing out a quick hook as a prelude to a new series?" Then you could have followed it up with something like: "That transformation was incredibly fast, are you planning on continuing the story describe more of these in detail? Maybe include perspectives from the eyes of the others guys around the pool? I have to admit, this format is really not my cup of tea, but I've always enjoyed your stories in the past and am curious to see if you'll take it further." Stuff like that is constructive criticism. Destructive criticism is stuff like "you didn't do this...you didn't do that...this is terrible...this is sloppy...all you did was..." Unfortunately all that does is tell the author, "You didn't write the story how I wanted you to." If you feel you need to proactively defend yourself by saying "it may look like X, but it's just my personal opinion..." Then you really did intend on doing X whether you like to admit it or not. Outside of grammar/syntax/academic-rules, criticism *IS* your own personal opinion as presented to the author. That much comes across without actually having to bluntly point it out as such. I would urge you in the future, please consider re-framing how you present your criticism of an author's writing to that author. It will be much more fruitful to not only you and the author, but to anyone else who happens to be watching, and possibly considering writing a story of their own.

I also want this story to continue. I think we're all in agreement. WE WILL BECOME.

Truly a classic -- love stories in this vein (see also the Bliss series by z119z)

Super hot story. Love the reality change for Ryan and Cole. Thanks for this...

Hypnocigarboy, I hope that you will reconsider and continue with this story. Like others have already commented, there are so many possibilities you can explore. I like a lot of the suggestions here, especially going into more detail of Superman's assimilation process and maybe The Boy Wonder and Nightwing coming to the rescue, only to succumb to the alien as well. Thanks for writing.

Please continue this story or at least add a new one with more armpit fun adventures

It was really refreshing! different and hot! Please, continue

Everthing behind a bigger plan, awesome!

How does Master make his Himbo's ? Hot to see them in action though.