Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/27/18, 12:00 AM
Enjoy the way you portray the hypnosis. Part 3 perhaps?
Apr 25, 2018
tomozco
4/26/18, 11:11 PM
This is a very interesting story! I too am curious as to what's happening with the real flesh Jones and Mike. I also wonder if the military is monitoring the bots...and what would happen if they realize Connor was tampering their human routines with his own fantasies...Anyway, looking forward to more!
Anonymous
4/26/18, 10:57 PM
The pool and alien combination really reminds me of Animorphs a bit! Keep writing and I would love to see what will happen.
Drone 2of4
4/26/18, 10:24 PM
I agree with nycboot's comments. I thought the writer's primary language was something other than English. And normally, this story would be hitting all my sweet spots. But the story seriously lacked a descriptive narrative. When I read something, I want to know how the characters feel. What did it feel like to be transformed into an alien? How did he feel to hear that voice infiltrate his mind? What did it feel like to submerge into the pool of rubber and be transformed? Did any of the characters attempt to resist, or was the voice too powerful that it overrode any desire for resistance? He did very well in building the setting for the story, but it just lacked little descriptions of what being transformed feels like. While I read it, I felt like my mind was having to insert a lot of the little nuances to really get me turned on. Don't get me wrong, I think this story has a lot of potential. I just don't want it to feel so flat.
nycboot
4/26/18, 10:03 PM
I'm going to make the assumption that English is not the author's first language. It's a great idea for a story (clearly inspired by rubbrsome's work), and what you have here is an outline. I suggest you write the story in your own language and see what are the parts that arouse you, Then expand those parts to make it truly arousing. This idea is a great start - now comes the work of making into something that will be enjoyable and make everyone ejaculate.
Apr 25, 2018
Anonymous
4/26/18, 9:20 PM
This was just really weird
Anonymous
4/26/18, 9:15 PM
Please continue this. More extreme humilation for the bully. I like the way you write the mind controlling. :)
Anonymous
4/26/18, 7:57 PM
I feel so sad for Alan. Can’t he join Sam?
Anonymous
4/26/18, 7:56 PM
Very good start! Loved it!
Anonymous
4/26/18, 3:58 PM
Love your stories! I always look out for your stories to read!