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4/5/18, 8:54 PM
I'm currently trying to edit the post, but there seems to be some error. I can't get back to the edit page. But as soon as i can. It'll be fixed.
Swizzington
4/5/18, 7:54 PM
The writing isn't THAT bad... Keep at it dude. This community could always use more authors.
4/5/18, 7:40 PM
THANK YOU ALL FOR SUCH AWESOME COMMENTS!! I really wasn't expecting such feedback. For those who understood the story, despite the many grammatical, and spelling flaws thank you. As i said I wrote this very early in the morning, and posted it in a half awake haze. I've written hundreds of stories, and just deleted them cause i wasn't sure of how people would react to them. But I figured i would give this a shot. I will agree with writing it down in a word processor to help with grammar and spelling. Notepad isn't the best at doing such things lol. :p but can agree that it can be annoying when reading a story, and can prevent you from entering the world that is trying to be created. I just wanted to get it posted before l lost my nerve lol. There is more to come. the next chapter is where we start the mind control, and starting to slowly put him into rubber. So stayed tune, and again thank you all for the constructive feedback.
Anonymous
4/5/18, 6:46 PM
The prior comment about editing was condescending --- but accurate.
Willie Cici
4/5/18, 6:30 PM
A month of writing and editing and still there are errors. I fixed the syntax. Thanks for the comment. I hope I speak for all the contributors to this site when I say that we want the readers to leave comments and text information. It makes for better writing and better story telling.
codypony
4/5/18, 5:35 PM
Having been a green and searching rubber wanna be boy myself at one time, looking for the the guardian of the hidden room, who i did eventually find in chat sessions in fact and He opened doors beyond my strangest imaginings, i very much enjoyed what i hope is only your first chapter. As to editing, i find when writing that sometimes the text comes tumbling out of the air in such a rush that i can barely keep up, and spit and polish must come much later when the continuity is solid, and my own body reacts the way i want my readers to react. Please keep at it for us! cody
Null0byte
4/5/18, 4:43 PM
To the ‘anon’ comment immediately above mine: You will get over yourself right now. Your comment was condescending and the opposite of constructive; your weak attempt to be “encouraging” at the end has the effect of being the opposite of doing so. I think the best part is that you don’t even have the courage to at least put an identifying handle on it. If that is the kind of feedback you wish to give people let’s see you put up a story for all to read. Better yet, just don’t comment. If you have any specific feedback to give the author, you can always send them an email with your feedback instead of anonymous condescension in public. He even asked for people to do just that, which is laudable. Part of writing and editing is that many times you need to have more than one pair of eyes on it as the writer will tend to read it as he or she means it in their head, rather than exactly what they put down on paper.
AeonFlux
4/5/18, 4:37 PM
Never mind post at 15:54 The story is very hot and if some people want to criticise they should buy a book from the store........ this is a site to write and share our deepdown fantasies Please keep on writing........
Anonymous
4/5/18, 4:04 PM
Great story!! Loved it!!
Anonymous
4/5/18, 4:03 PM
I agree!! Really hot! Loved the pics.