Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/1/18, 2:57 AM
English is a little stiff, but it’s still very descriptive and hot! Can’t wait for the next part! Nothing hotter than a victim cumming against his will.
Cumluvnbottom@yahoo.com
4/1/18, 12:07 AM
Great writing, great fantasy, great sex. The only thing that threw me a bit... so Nathan / Nate spent years in the “gym world” beefing up and having sex with the trainers (and a book... which was hot btw) and then came back and spent years having sex with Sam? Or am I misunderstanding something? Thinking of sections like: “By the time Sam and Nate had gotten through the years of makeouts and the years of oral sex and found themselves ready for some serious fucking,...”
3/31/18, 11:28 PM
You're going to prompt a lot of people to run out and buy seven-sided dice: https://www.thediceshoponline.com/dice-sets/157/D7-Specialist-Dice
screamingmoist
3/31/18, 11:16 PM
haha, whoops! There are weird shaped dice, right? Didn't even catch that.
Tass
3/31/18, 10:59 PM
Great Plot, well written can‘t Waisen for more. Perhaps some Body mods - tattoo Sand Piercings - for Mark
Anonymous
3/31/18, 10:58 PM
Interesting. Will he be a drone or will his mind be changed so he willingly obeys?
3/31/18, 9:03 PM
Quite hot. Love the 'everything here is fine' and the motif of the bunny ears leading to the changes. I also liked the buttplay. Very hot. :)
Anonymous
3/31/18, 8:57 PM
GREAT STORY
Anonymous
3/31/18, 7:58 PM
Very clever!! Like the Welsh as an alien language. Funny!!
Anonymous
3/31/18, 4:26 PM
Nice! This was a hot beginning to your story. Your English is fine; just the occasional problem with the subjunctive (always hard!) and the declensions on a few adverbs and adjectives. Not a big deal. Still very easy to understand. If you want me to edit the next part before you post it, let me know. Otherwise, no worries. It was great!