Recent Comments

Anonymous
3/31/18, 4:26 PM
Nice! This was a hot beginning to your story. Your English is fine; just the occasional problem with the subjunctive (always hard!) and the declensions on a few adverbs and adjectives. Not a big deal. Still very easy to understand. If you want me to edit the next part before you post it, let me know. Otherwise, no worries. It was great!
Anonymous
3/31/18, 3:37 PM
Please continue
Martin
3/31/18, 3:36 PM
Darmani has written up long and interesting comment on this series on the forum, which you might find interesting. Check it out: http://forum.gayspiralstories.com/t/regarding-belials-legacy/410
Anonymous
3/31/18, 3:13 PM
Awesome story! I agree make him remember who he was, and force him to obey and slowly love his torment. Looking forward to more.
Anonymous
3/31/18, 3:07 PM
EXCELLENT!!I would love to make the suffering and process last. Love the internal conflict and mental conflict,
Anonymous
3/31/18, 2:43 PM
Great start! Looking forward to the next chapter.
Anonymous
3/31/18, 2:12 PM
Great job
Anonymous
3/31/18, 1:26 PM
Cute!
Anonymous
3/31/18, 1:26 PM
Great story! Looking forward to more :) Would be hot to see Matt retain his macho jock persona, just clueless to the protagonist's wishes/commands
David S
3/31/18, 12:12 PM
While reading this, I had no idea English was not your first language. You write better than a lot of native English speakers! Hope to read more of this hot story! Thank you!