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Anonymous
3/30/18, 4:03 AM
Enjoyed this one a LOT, particularly the blurred reality scenes at the end, after Byron tells Craig to "Look. At. Them." Very hot. That sort of stuff really gets me off, somewhat reminiscent of scenes from "The Devil's Advocate" and "Jacob's Ladder." Looking forward to future chapters. Nice work.
3/30/18, 2:54 AM
If you mean the protagonist, I purposely kept him vague to make him easier to self-identify. I will keep that in mind for future stories, however.
Anonymous
3/29/18, 8:12 PM
Awesome
Anonymous
3/29/18, 7:23 PM
Glad you are getting into this kind of story. Very hot.
3/29/18, 4:59 PM
null0byte: You are a horrible person and should definitely write us a story in that throbbing vein of punning innuendo.
null0byte
3/29/18, 3:27 PM
Well, hallelujah for me that I read this after the oopsie draft was replaced, because for a moment there I was about to be done with the whole story line. I was like, "piggies? What on earth are they squealing about? Please tell me that this isn't going to go into the dual channels of that stereotype..." And, then I read a little bit further down. I, for one, am glad that this chapter ended like it did. Finn turned out to be an even bigger dick than Jackson was. Now that they are on an even length, they can both grow as characters. I think you captured the two quite perfectly; all without fapping the reader along the head with forced strokes. I look forward to the rest of the story, and hopefully both Jackson and Finn can grow and be redeemed. The road for them will be long and hard, I am sure, but they should be able to thrust their way through and come out ahead. I do tend to be a sucker for happy endings after all.
Anonymous
3/29/18, 10:48 AM
I would ove to see a face picture of what Derek became
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3/29/18, 9:47 AM
I think knowing the character a bit more would incresse the impact
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3/29/18, 9:27 AM
would have liked a bit more detail he made him kiss and make out like he was a girl and groped his cock and the victim showing that he is conflicted about what he is dong
3/29/18, 7:36 AM
I guess that wasn't clear! The person is only suggestible for the hour. Any changes remain. The nameless protagonist is the QB still when the hour is up with wimpy Jake as his boyfriend. And thanks for the compliments, guys! Not sure how to do a chapter 2, though. I do like jock take downs, so I will at least continue with that sort of stuff.