Recent Comments

null0byte
3/29/18, 3:27 PM
Well, hallelujah for me that I read this after the oopsie draft was replaced, because for a moment there I was about to be done with the whole story line. I was like, "piggies? What on earth are they squealing about? Please tell me that this isn't going to go into the dual channels of that stereotype..." And, then I read a little bit further down. I, for one, am glad that this chapter ended like it did. Finn turned out to be an even bigger dick than Jackson was. Now that they are on an even length, they can both grow as characters. I think you captured the two quite perfectly; all without fapping the reader along the head with forced strokes. I look forward to the rest of the story, and hopefully both Jackson and Finn can grow and be redeemed. The road for them will be long and hard, I am sure, but they should be able to thrust their way through and come out ahead. I do tend to be a sucker for happy endings after all.
Anonymous
3/29/18, 10:48 AM
I would ove to see a face picture of what Derek became
williamlebeau4@hotmail.com
3/29/18, 9:47 AM
I think knowing the character a bit more would incresse the impact
mycockslave3@gmail.com. mycock
3/29/18, 9:27 AM
would have liked a bit more detail he made him kiss and make out like he was a girl and groped his cock and the victim showing that he is conflicted about what he is dong
3/29/18, 7:36 AM
I guess that wasn't clear! The person is only suggestible for the hour. Any changes remain. The nameless protagonist is the QB still when the hour is up with wimpy Jake as his boyfriend. And thanks for the compliments, guys! Not sure how to do a chapter 2, though. I do like jock take downs, so I will at least continue with that sort of stuff.
Anonymous
3/29/18, 6:50 AM
Nice! Zippered bliss.... What about a part 2 or 3?
3/29/18, 5:31 AM
Please write more. This is great!
Anonymous
3/29/18, 5:00 AM
Can't wait for part two to find out what happened with Leo and how Dustin becomes a new apprentice to Barber Dan.
Anonymous
3/29/18, 4:58 AM
Awesome! Loved it! Chapter 2 maybe? :P
Mar 13, 2018
Anonymous
3/29/18, 4:43 AM
They all graduated from the naval acedemy together? Capt, Lt cmdr, and COB - which is an enlisted sailor. I will continue to read and block their back stories.