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2/24/18, 9:27 PM
Cheers for the feedback! The Hypno coin may turn up again at some point, he'd clean his room sometime and find it eventually. And dang, I was going for 'wistful look at the future' rather than just rushed anecdotes, but that's something to work on. The changes is this story are very temporary, lasting only as long as they're being looked at through the lenses. Technically they probably even revert every time Rory blinks, but that's too fast to notice. As for a sequel, most of the stories I'm writing at the moment are one shots, in part because I have the idea for the story but no real direction for it. But, if you see something you'd really like to see more of, I welcome suggestions.
Anonymous
2/24/18, 6:46 PM
are the changer permanet or temporary?
Anonymous
2/24/18, 5:20 PM
Great sequel! I would like to see more actions.
2/24/18, 4:20 PM
When I was a kid, my mom convinced me not to order a hypno coin, persuading me that it could be too dangerous. Guess she was right!
Anonymous
2/24/18, 4:04 PM
I would have loved to see more leading up to the choice between the two, to feel a pull at the heartstrings and secretly vote for one or the other. Also, did he pursue a PhD or not? Waaah cliffhangers! 10 outta 10 always!!
Anonymous
2/24/18, 3:41 PM
Love this chapter! Small, subtle plot twist was fun!
2/24/18, 1:56 PM
Seth -- I hadn't really planned to expand the three vignettes I posted the other day. They were all originally "captions" at maletransformation.blogspot.com which I had totally forgotten about until I remembered "Morning Train" the other day. That said, I like your suggestions and could definitely see a logical way to extend the story, especially if Joseph ends up modeling for a photographer with a similar talent for stealing souls. I'll give it some thought.
Anonymous
2/24/18, 1:16 PM
@ trytoknowyou Well your comment was hardly constructive was it? As to contributions I can't find any stories under your name. OP - there is a story in here but it is just a little lost. Might I suggest that in future you write your story in e.g. word then leave if for a couple of days then re-read it and then edit it as a couple of days later errors and repetitions are more easily found and corrected than they are immediately after you first write. This advice is not specific to you - some of the more prolific writes on here could follow this advice as well!
2/24/18, 12:45 PM
Really enjoyed this. Looking forward to next chapter.
Seth
2/24/18, 10:13 AM
Please continue this! I would be most interested to see if he keeps the jock's body. It would be interesting if he made a full swap with the jock by putting the soul in the camera in his old body, and it would be fun to see the jocks girlfriend accidentally find gay porn of her former boyfriend on the internet.