Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/8/18, 6:42 AM
That was rather rude. Anyway I enjoyed the story. Keep on writing.
1/8/18, 4:51 AM
Terrific start! I hope you continue this soon!
1/8/18, 2:43 AM
9th chapter now please. It kind of sucks when other story parts come out much later and you forget characters and scenes and have to go back or reread.
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:56 AM
*half
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:55 AM
It does seem almost like two people wrote this story. About halr way through the tenses change and the grammar gets really bad. It could use editing. I would not say the story was "predictable", but could have been filled out more with more gradual "changes".
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:30 AM
Don't worry. I read it three times. Loved it every time.
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:29 AM
Poorly written and predictable. Grammar/usage were awful. Did you even bother editing? As for the story, like I said, predictable. I read the whole story hoping something different, but I was disappointed.
TheWanderer
1/7/18, 11:29 PM
Or maybe it doesn’t :) maybe it didn’t change anything at all
Anonymous
1/7/18, 11:05 PM
How can a placebo effect make you gay? hmmmmm.
1/7/18, 8:42 PM
Was trying to weave them in a bit more fluidly than I usually do, evidently it didn't work out well, lol. Thanks much for the feedback.