Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/8/18, 2:10 PM
very hot man, thank you!
Anonymous
1/8/18, 7:24 AM
the sooner the better, plz. learning of ch. 9 already finished make me getting hard immediately!!
Anonymous
1/8/18, 6:42 AM
That was rather rude. Anyway I enjoyed the story. Keep on writing.
1/8/18, 4:51 AM
Terrific start! I hope you continue this soon!
1/8/18, 2:43 AM
9th chapter now please. It kind of sucks when other story parts come out much later and you forget characters and scenes and have to go back or reread.
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:56 AM
*half
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:55 AM
It does seem almost like two people wrote this story. About halr way through the tenses change and the grammar gets really bad. It could use editing. I would not say the story was "predictable", but could have been filled out more with more gradual "changes".
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:30 AM
Don't worry. I read it three times. Loved it every time.
Anonymous
1/8/18, 1:29 AM
Poorly written and predictable. Grammar/usage were awful. Did you even bother editing? As for the story, like I said, predictable. I read the whole story hoping something different, but I was disappointed.