Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/1/17, 7:02 AM
Oh yay! These are back up! Will ypu be adding batter up as well? I hope so, those stories were great too!
Anonymous
12/1/17, 6:58 AM
I really like the concept and the writing in this story. I only have one suggestion, and I'm making it because I think you have a talent for writing and this may help in the future: Your main character is too powerful, in my opinion. There's simply no struggle, and to me that takes something away from the otherwise very good story and writing. By way of analogy, I play the game Civilization. The first hundred or so turns tend to be difficult, but then I get to the point where I'm much more powerful than any of the AI players. And it just becomes boring.
Anonymous
12/1/17, 6:47 AM
Cheering for Nathan take back your Brendan and make the sexy Troy being injected with nanobots and obey.
Anonymous
12/1/17, 5:24 AM
steal it and used it...
Anonymous
12/1/17, 5:19 AM
When a mind controller doesn't properly secure their equipment, I find it hard to cheer them on. I'm rooting for Troy :)
SkyWing
12/1/17, 4:32 AM
Agree with the ones above! :P
Anonymous
12/1/17, 3:20 AM
great addition but why does this need to end in incest, like can that please not be a recurring theme cause it's weird
Anonymous
12/1/17, 2:57 AM
super story.....loved it...taken...bondage
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12/1/17, 2:45 AM
Dude that kicked ass. I saw your name so I put my phone down til I had a couple of hours - totes worth it. I blew up all over my chest right when the last guy yelled it out. If ur sending those new copies around, make sure one ends up with me huh? I’d play your game :)
Anonymous
12/1/17, 2:45 AM
I really wish you’d write chapter 4. I love this story