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Jun 28, 2017
bateriam
8/29/17, 7:26 AM
Raised my laptop off my lap, Dude.
AeonFlux
8/29/17, 4:50 AM
Love to read the next one ....... get the frat and turn them into sluts
8/29/17, 4:45 AM
I can't wait for more of his frat bros to join the team! Loved this!
Anonymous
8/29/17, 4:12 AM
Love the story!! I hope you could show us more about Tom and his background. I am guessing Tom himself went through the same process.
8/29/17, 3:52 AM
So exciting to see something else new from you. This is an extremely hot story. So well done!
Anonymous
8/29/17, 3:19 AM
Apart from the names getting all jumbled up in places, this was great.
8/29/17, 3:17 AM
It's not that you don't write about sex well, it's that practically all the other elements of the story overpower the sex - which is not a negative comment. When you think about most stories on here, there's actually not that much plot and very infrequently is there vivid character development. You've got them. One should do what one does well. Not to diminish from Catalyst, but if you want to experiment, perhaps try something where there are no supernatural effects or exotic settings, just the combination of lust & desire with mind control. Even in Proust the sex is minor. ;) Meanwhile I'm wondering how Jamal is going to deal with returning to England. He's changed and is now a different person - will his (presumably affectionate) memories come into conflict with the reality? (I wouldn't mind if you killed off Livia, unless her absence would harm the other four.) And Nazir, a Muslim, growing up under Jewish supervision - I can't believe it's that easy for him to feast on pork.
Anonymous
8/29/17, 2:15 AM
It seems like this one needs to spend a little more time dwelling on the changes in perspective. It all seems very sudden and rushed.
Anonymous
8/29/17, 1:45 AM
I enjoyed it. Ass and mind transformations are both pretty fun. Definitely interested in seeing what happens to the world when the product is shipped.
Andyrew36
8/29/17, 1:38 AM
Yes workignon the frat boy one tomorrow actually.