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Jun 25, 2017
bateriam
8/25/17, 10:46 PM
Man! Read it in two sittings - one dressed and hard . . . and now naked and bating. Just gotta say, "Thanks!"
screamingmoist
8/25/17, 9:41 PM
Thanks for reading and for the kind feedback! Glad people are enjoying it. @ChaoticDjinn - haha, builds suspense, right? Since most people are reading on their phones I try to keep the posts to 10 page chunks. Anything longer and the consensus seemed to be that it starts to feel clunky.
Nnnrg
8/25/17, 9:09 PM
I was just remembering this story and was curious if you've thought much about the fifth part.
Swizzington
8/25/17, 8:39 PM
Hey! Pretty good story. I enjoyed it. You aren't going to catch every typo in your work - I certainly don't in mine - but I would encourage you to do a slightly more thorough proofread of this. There's a few errors. It can break the immersion sometimes - just saying! I had to laugh when Tod was looking over the job advertisement and read the criteria "Won't be missed by anyone" and did not even think to question it. Not sure how realistic that is! But yeah, still a good story!
8/25/17, 7:47 PM
More changes! I hope it ends well. Please continue!
ChaoticDjinn
8/25/17, 7:46 PM
The last turn was Ned's the square he landed on just happened to change Andy since he was the only freshly showered guy in the room. The couplet at the end was Ned's , its just no one saw it until Andy took his next turn.
Anonymous
8/25/17, 7:16 PM
Yeh, I second that. Always *enjoy* your stuff so much, and you write really well.
8/25/17, 7:03 PM
@nycboot Most definitely!
nycboot
8/25/17, 4:03 PM
Thank you! I love these weird alien takeover stories. Will there be a subsequent installment?
Marvyn Greene
8/25/17, 3:42 PM
This is very well written indeed. Well done.