Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/23/17, 4:43 AM
Really liked it!
Reverse Critic
8/23/17, 3:15 AM
Lad, write all you want and all you can. If you listen (selectively) to the feedback you'll improve. It's a fantasy I'm sure others share. True that editing and punctuation would make it more readable but stick with it. And to the cynic who called you "Son"... bug off.
KnightRider
8/23/17, 2:22 AM
Turning a bunch of frat bros into thuggish leather bikers would be so damn hot.
Anonymous
8/23/17, 2:10 AM
I agree!!
Anonymous
8/23/17, 2:08 AM
Son If you don't how to write, don't bother. The grammar sucks. It's awful, practically unreadable.
Anonymous
8/23/17, 1:35 AM
This was hot!
Boston Satyr
8/23/17, 1:29 AM
This is an excellent story premise! More of Mr. Jin!!
Anonymous
8/22/17, 10:06 PM
Much easier to try and read than the first story. You can really see that you've taken on the feedback and tried to give it more structure. Could still do with a little more focus when it comes to the editing though. There are some great ideas here, would be a shame not to give them attention they deserve.
Andyrew36
8/22/17, 9:59 PM
Lenny, Yea a frat sounds good!!! Do we want them to be hippies? Fatties? Leather bikes? I'm always open to new ideas
Lenny
8/22/17, 8:53 PM
Next one how about a frat doing community service in the park. Great story.