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Aug 19, 2017
AeonFlux
8/20/17, 7:19 PM
Please......... write it........and tell us what the stain can do to you 😁
Anonymous
8/20/17, 6:55 PM
Very hot ! Made me cum so hard. Please have a chapter that focuses more on families and dads getting humiliated and dominated. Thanks !!
BankStreet
8/20/17, 6:49 PM
I'd be very pleased to provide an editorial review of your next submission. No charge. Thirty+ years experience as a professional editor. Two degrees in English. hbs46@yahoo.com
Aug 19, 2017
LongtimeFan
8/20/17, 6:43 PM
Another fantastic story! I don't know what it is, Hypnothrill, but you REALLY know how to write dialogue indicating altered states (distant, robotic talk in this one, "meathead"/dumber talk in series like Meatz and Musclehead, and generally just awesome phrasing). Reading the altered words and thought processes always gets me going. Keep it up!
8/20/17, 6:39 PM
Please do continue this.
Anonymous
8/20/17, 6:34 PM
This was hot! Would love to see a continuation.
8/20/17, 5:25 PM
I am the author
8/20/17, 5:17 PM
...or ask the author to post their email so you can help. ...or post your email, or a link to your tumblr or other social media, so the author can contact you for help with proof-reading.
gaymindsthinkalike
8/20/17, 5:16 PM
thanks for pointing it out
8/20/17, 5:14 PM
Constructive criticism is great and all guys, but: a) straight up negative criticism doesn't usually help b) it's tough for new writers in this genre to ask friends to edit... because most people don't tell their real life friends that they write gay mind control stories. If you're going to criticize someone's writing and tell them to get it proof-read, man up and email them offering to do the proof-reading.