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Anonymous
7/10/17, 6:42 AM
This story was just plain, well-thought out and expertly written. I can honestly say that I was enthralled and captivated with the writing style as well as the situation in its entirety. Good job to both of the authors for this marvelous written piece.
Anonymous
7/10/17, 6:14 AM
While I understand you had to keep the scenario is short due to the word limit provided. This was excellent, as usual. I enjoyed your first chapter immensely! This one did not disappoint! I don't know whether you plan to continue this? Doesn't seem like it, based on how it ended. I look forward to seeing more of your work!! :D
Taro
7/10/17, 6:08 AM
Can't wait for next chapter :)
ChaoticDjinn
7/10/17, 4:04 AM
As a little side note, i apologize if this seems a little bit condensed to some. it was done as a part of a commission and restricted to a certain word count. That being said, i'm opening up a Patreon very soon and will have some of my origional works popping up on there, ones where i just free write with no limits, so they should be more full and fleshed out feeling. Much of what i write there will eventually find its way here, after a time delay.
Anonymous
7/10/17, 3:34 AM
Interesting.
Cumluvnbottom@yahoo.com
7/10/17, 2:37 AM
Excellent so far. Looking forward to more.
UchihaDEMS
7/10/17, 2:15 AM
If we are going to talk about tastes, as I said in the previous chapter, I would love to see him fool around with an older man rather than his acquaintances. But, as you said, you write what you want to read and thats cool, I respect that. Please, do continue~
7/10/17, 12:48 AM
And to clarify, yes that was what I meant with Eddy and Isaac. Like he was being carried around on Isaacs cock, supported by Isaac holding up Eddy's legs
7/10/17, 12:44 AM
Thank You! I appreciate the feedback. Yea that scene was a bit muddy. I couldn't think up of the right words at that time when I was writing, and I was just very excited to put this out. Should give it more time to cool, and then look at it over again. Again, thanks for the read and advice :)
Anonymous
7/10/17, 12:36 AM
Hey! Great story. You're a great writer, really enjoying this. But I do have some feedback. I felt kind of lost reading about the scene between Eddy and isaac. It felt like they teleported between positions or something. It wasn't clear what you meant when he said he and Eddy walked over to Alicia, or that he put Eddy's legs up. You mean he picked Eddy up and was carrying him around on his cock like luggage or something? I just felt some of the descriptions in this otherwise hot scene needed a little more fleshing out. It was hard to imagine a guy effortlessly picking up another guy without any sort of exertion. I also felt the bits about Isaac's personal life was a teeny bit dragged out. I hope you don't take this personally though! I recognize great writing potential in you, and look forward to reading more :) Very hot stuff we have here.