Recent Comments

nnnrg
6/17/17, 4:50 PM
One of your other stories got the comment that you're becoming too dependent on the images. In this case, they worked for the story, but I have also noticed that your descriptions of your characters have become sparse and lazy, which has a negative impact on your writing. Please don't leave out the adjectives! Describe your characters in the text as well as linking images, because your writing becomes more three-dimensional as you do that.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 3:58 PM
I love the part where Ales had gotten aware of something strange but forced to return to the induction. I appreciate this kind of despairing situation.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 3:47 PM
Love this series. If you've got another installment to write, please go ahead. I think everyone will be pleased. You never disappoint!
Anonymous
6/17/17, 3:25 PM
Damn Willie you got a great series here. Guess who the partner is will be revealed next ,if there is a next
Anonymous
6/17/17, 2:46 PM
Great series!!
Anonymous
6/17/17, 2:18 PM
Pi is not pie in Greek.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 1:30 PM
love the story! the induction and the transformation part is really hot!
BankStreet
6/17/17, 1:11 PM
I know you're probably fed up with feedback regarding the spelling and other editorial problems in this story...but I had make one additional observation:.if you're going to misspell the Greek-alphabet name of the fraternity, it's probably best to not do so in such a ludicrous way.
Meatbox
6/17/17, 12:53 PM
Thanks good ideas I'll take more time with the next one.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 12:43 PM
repeated paragraph, punctuation, spelling (Board vs Bored) and grammar mistakes were distractions but the story line is good and I like the Anti-hero idea. Super rape or having a five man orgy with him servicing them all at the same time because of his super speed.. all wonderful possibilities. Very imaginative!