Recent Comments

Meatbox
6/17/17, 12:53 PM
Thanks good ideas I'll take more time with the next one.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 12:43 PM
repeated paragraph, punctuation, spelling (Board vs Bored) and grammar mistakes were distractions but the story line is good and I like the Anti-hero idea. Super rape or having a five man orgy with him servicing them all at the same time because of his super speed.. all wonderful possibilities. Very imaginative!
Anonymous
6/17/17, 12:01 PM
LOVED IT, and the illustrations as well.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 11:52 AM
Thanks man! Blew a few loads to this story. I actually work out naked with a private trainer and it's way better than wearing clothes!
Anonymous
6/17/17, 10:38 AM
Thanks for the feedback.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 9:58 AM
The lack of punctuation killed this story for me
Anonymous
6/17/17, 8:04 AM
I'll have to be the outlier and say I'm actually liking it and looking forward to the next chapters. Hope you're still interested in making them ... Yeah I guess that makes me creepy too. :D
Rider Vitalli
6/17/17, 6:01 AM
I'll admit, the story as is was written as an extended caption, not ever meant to be fully fleshed out. My writing tends to be either long and detailed, OR swift and to the point. I can see where this makes the story feel rushed. I love all the advice and ideas you've all given! This is why I posted here as well as CYOC! I'll keep all of this in mind next time I write something! Also, Cigarcubatx, I'd love to chat! hit me up, my email is available and we can definitely discuss ideas! =D
Anonymous
6/17/17, 5:57 AM
The further and further the story goes the creepier and less appealing it becomes.
cigarcubatx
6/17/17, 4:51 AM
As far as a second chapter, I wouldn't mind seeing him returning to the man of his own volition.