Recent Comments

Anonymous
6/17/17, 9:58 AM
The lack of punctuation killed this story for me
Anonymous
6/17/17, 8:04 AM
I'll have to be the outlier and say I'm actually liking it and looking forward to the next chapters. Hope you're still interested in making them ... Yeah I guess that makes me creepy too. :D
Rider Vitalli
6/17/17, 6:01 AM
I'll admit, the story as is was written as an extended caption, not ever meant to be fully fleshed out. My writing tends to be either long and detailed, OR swift and to the point. I can see where this makes the story feel rushed. I love all the advice and ideas you've all given! This is why I posted here as well as CYOC! I'll keep all of this in mind next time I write something! Also, Cigarcubatx, I'd love to chat! hit me up, my email is available and we can definitely discuss ideas! =D
Anonymous
6/17/17, 5:57 AM
The further and further the story goes the creepier and less appealing it becomes.
cigarcubatx
6/17/17, 4:51 AM
As far as a second chapter, I wouldn't mind seeing him returning to the man of his own volition.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 3:19 AM
I am loving this series. Grew up in Brooklyn. Subways were part of life. Keep writing.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 3:17 AM
Who the f*** pissed you off? Damn!! I hope your writing is therapeutic.
Anonymous
6/17/17, 1:27 AM
I like where this is going actually. It's not your typical robot story and I really find it hot. Keep writing and keep up the good work!
Anonymous
6/16/17, 10:22 PM
I dont mean to get personal but Edlam, could you tell me how many words, one third of the chapter, 5000 words, or else, to narrate the ginger family in the next chapter? I really miss them... Thx!
Anonymous
6/16/17, 3:36 PM
Love your dark and evil stories. It matches your style of writing. You are doing a great job!!